Wednesday, April 16, 2008

Cartoon 67

Caption: Anon.

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Scott from Oregon said...

I have a question for anybody. I have a character who speechifies a bit and I want to demonstrate that he pauses in these speeches, but I don't want to write "he pauses".

What I did was to break his speech into paragraphs, at times. Anybody know the correct way (or if there is a correct way) to punctuate this? Here is an example--

“None of you will of course mind dying.” Malcolm stated slowly. “You’ve got better places to be than this spiritual shit-hole, and you’ve been waiting for me to arrive for quite a long time, I suspect--

--If you don’t mind me saying, I’d be thanking me for what I plan to do. They claim when you get there, angels will be waiting, and eternal bliss will be the reward for your cowering servitude.”

I tried the dashes to promote continuity. Anybody?

Evil Editor said...

Normally a dash shows the speech was interrupted. An ellipsis in the middle of one character's speech would show a pause.

Wes said...

How about having your character pause by doing something, such as taking a drink, checking his/her watch, reflecting on a post in EE's blog, etc.?

Evil Editor said...

Unchosen Captions:

Dammit, I hate it when the family come around unannounced. --anon.

Your opening's fine, the middle's so-so but I'm afraid your ending is way too melodramatic...--WO

Nancy Beck said...

HAHA!! That was good! :-)

Nancy Beck said...


BTW, I agree with EE in that usually a dash signifies an interruption, while an elipsis signifies hesitation or a pause.

I also like wes' suggestion. Maybe you can have him doing other things, like giving the evil eye to his weredingo or something. ;-)

Just a thought.