Monday, December 03, 2007
Guess the Plot
1. When Franny McVane got that new duck whistle for hunting season, she was hoping to summon ducks, not hurricanes. Now that she has the whistle, however, she wonders how much the people of Whitley, Montana will pay to be hurricane-free this year.
2. It is a dream come true for teenager Steffy Swanberg, aspiring actress, when she lands a spot on the "Weathercaller" show, in which participants vie to predict the weather. Too bad her first episode will be her last, unless a tornado really does destroy Fargo.
3. Chicago weatherman Freddie Hearst's biggest "fan" swears on the air that he's going to kill Freddie. Why? Freddie has predicted a sunny weekend that was instead greeted by rain - again. And apparently everyone else in Chicagoland feels the same way, because as the caller's threats become more terrifying, the ratings skyrocket.
4. Jonathan is a Weathercaller: he uses the imprisoned souls of dead wizards to summon rain. But now he's been arrested and sentenced to have his own soul imprisoned. Now I wonder, still I wonder, who'll call the rain?
5. When Dave hacked into "Project Weathercaller" he thought it was a computer game. He had no idea it was the super secret center coordinating America's 27 spy agencies. Soon Agent 419 is torturing kidnapped undercover lingerie model Mae Wong in a Polish dungeon, desperate to find a box of plutonium that never even existed. And a bomb-laden drone is flying toward Poland to vaporize them both.
6. Rob Jones is the worst TV weather guy in the world, so his future looks doubtful--until he meets weather goddess Glorietta. It's love at first sight, so she decides to help out, adjusting the weather to fulfill his forecasts. But when Springfield is treated to blizzard, flood, and heat wave -- all in three hours--no one is pleased.
I am seeking representation for "Weathercaller," a fantasy novel with romance elements, complete at 100,000 words.
Delia has two jobs: one everyone knows about, and one she must never speak of.
Her first job is to act as Second [and her second job is to act as First. Is this a Who's on first routine, or a Monty Python skit? Let me guess: Her third job is to play first violin in the Fifth Dimension's Fourth of July concert.] to Jonathan, a Weathercaller responsible for summoning rain to a thirsty land. Pulling the clouds over the mountains is not easy; to accomplish it, Delia and Jonathan must draw power from bondspirits, the imprisoned souls of long-dead wizards. [They have the power to imprison souls, but they need to hire a guy to make it rain?]
Delia's second job is to engage in some espionage on behalf of a magistrate named Marcus, who, in return for her service, has promised to deal leniently with her imprisoned brother. Marcus believes Jonathan is engaged in treasonous research and may intend to free the bondspirits. If he frees the bondspirits, the populace will starve. Marcus charges Delia with observing Jonathan's activities, collecting evidence of his wrongdoing, and sabotaging his research.
Delia has no qualms about exposing a traitor, but as she gets to know Jonathan, she discovers he's not one. He's right to want to free the bondspirits, who are tortured souls, cruelly enslaved and denied the afterlife. [She discovers this just from getting to know Jonathan?] His "treasonous" research consists of adapting drought-resistant crops to the region-crops that could be grown without the aid of bondspirits. [Won't that put him out of a job? Ever notice that you don't see Exxon-Mobil trying to invent cars that run without gas or oil?] To make matters worse, she's falling in love with him.
She regrets having passed so much information along to Marcus. She's afraid Jonathan will discover her duplicity, and worries still more what will happen to her brother if she reneges on her contract with Marcus. But when Jonathan is arrested and sentenced to be enslaved as a bondspirit, [Bondspirits are the souls of long-dead wizards. Thus I infer that Jonathan is a wizard, but that he has so little power he can't escape a prison. And that they have the ability to capture his soul. And that they think they can get rain without him.] she knows she must act, to save not only Jonathan's soul, but her own.
I would be happy to send you a partial or full manuscript. Thank you for your time.
Who, specifically, has imprisoned the dead wizards' souls? Marcus? The populace? An evil overlord?
You say Marcus believes Jonathan is engaged in treasonous research. Is he a misguided good guy or a bad guy?
Is Delia's brother imprisoned justly? What's the charge?
Given that if he frees the bondspirits the populace will starve, I assume that if Jonathan plans to free the bondspirits, he also has a plan to feed everyone?
If you're going to enslave your Weathercaller, shouldn't you wait until after he develops his drought-resistant crops?
It reads okay, but I'd like a few questions cleared up.