Wednesday, July 19, 2006
Guess the Plot
1. Caught in the boat house with the new French maid, buck-naked except for his rubber horsey head, Boone needed a story and needed it fast.
2. Late at night, depressed and divorced Joanna teaches herself to conduct activities while deep in REM sleep. Not only is her house sparkling clean in the morning, she's been having fantastic daydreams of nighttime flings with her neighbor.
3. Sleeper agent Salman Al-Hamdani has lost his passion for his mission--and for life itself--until he meets a sassy African-American flight attendant named William who brings the spark back to Salman's life...and ultimately to the fuse on his bomb.
4. When the old lady asked Harold for a dime, he laughed and told her to jump off a bridge, unaware that she was Somnia, the goddess of sleep. Now, trapped in her netherworld, he must travel through nightmares for eternity.
5. Elite soldier Randy Pilton trained himself to sleep while walking on long, forced marches. Now that he's back home in his small Iowa town, some suspect him in the recent rash of brutal midnight murders of 7-11 clerks.
6. Paralyzed after an accident, Blake Warren will never walk again-while awake. But an unexpected opportunity arises in the form of an experimental and risky new medical procedure.
After accepting a position as a research assistant, Jamie Grinburg travels to a hamlet in the middle of the desert. [I believe that's what's known as a mirage.] The nightmare that awaits him in the shadows [Shadows? In the desert? Must be the ones cast by the vultures circling over his head as he crawls toward the "hamlet."] will test his mettle and bring him face to face with his worst fears.
Blake Warren was once the emperor of his universe. Now paralyzed from a terrible accident, [Or was it an accident? he wonders. Maybe my mistake was trusting the empress of my universe to pack my parachute.] he laments over the power he’s lost and the happiness he once knew. Desperation commands him to take part in an experiment [that will turn him into M.A.N.T.I.S., the paraplegic superhero, and] that will lead him down a path of malevolence and self-destruction.
Sleepwalking is cerebral thriller that brings the two protagonists spiraling towards a cataclysmic conclusion. Pages will turn on their own as the reader is assaulted with [hurricane force winds?] dark intrigues and unworldly beings. [That's it? That's all you're giving me? There's some guy in the desert and a paralyzed guy is going to be part of an experiment? What unworldly beings? Does anything actually happen?] [This paragraph (toned down) belongs on the back of your book, not the bottom of your query.]
My background is largely in medicine which lends itself to the many hospital scenes that appear in this book. I have been a Respiratory Therapist for 12 years. During that time, I have had several articles published in professional journals. My agent was recently forced to close her agency due to a debilitating illness. [No need to include this.] My manuscript is approximately 100,000 words in length.
If you would like to see an outline, a synopsis or sample chapters, please let me know.
Thank you for your consideration,
More specificity would be a good start toward conveying the book's plot. And let the editor be the one who discovers that the pages miraculously turn themselves.