Thursday, September 01, 2011
Guess the Plot
1. It's a planet where the self-proclaimed most intelligent species passes down tall tales about super beings from generation to generation, until many of their descendants not only come to believe the stories . . . they will kill anyone who doesn't.
2. A purple alien from the planet Weird comes to Earth to study American politics and becomes the president of the United States. Also a hostile takeover.
3. When something dangerous starts possessing her fellow junior high students, Drazoral isn't affected because she's actually an Andromedan disguised as an 8th-grade Earthling. Should she go back to Andromeda or stay on "Planet Weird" and try to save her classmates?
4. Twelve-year-old Megan Conaway often tells her little brother that he belongs on Planet Weird. Imagine her shock when the king of Planet Weird spirits them both away one night to their "true" home, which is in danger of being overrun by the Normal People.
5. Alien Probe, the new ride at theme park Planet Weird, isn't exactly what patrons expect. They come out with no memory of what happened, and inflamed anuses.
6. Jim and Terry's sixth grade class are excited when they find that their field trip is to Planet Weird . . . until they learn they'll be in a cryostasis chamber for the next 73 years.
Dear Evil Editor,
When Drazoral [That sounds like a sleeping pill] comes to Earth disguised as a thirteen year old human named Drew Vardaman, she only wants two things: a life free from the obligation of saving others,
[Drazoral: I'm sick of saving people. I wanna go where I can watch people die and laugh about it.
Draz's mom: Be careful what you wish for. We might send you to Earth.]
and to graduate the eighth grade so she can officially become an Earth-citizen. Being Drew isn’t so terrible, and although Earth is weird, Drazoral doesn’t plan on going back to Andromeda any time soon.
Since the halls of Planet Jr. High are filled with Wanderers and Earthlings, alike, [The first comma isn't needed. Neither is "alike."] Drew has to learn quickly how to become this new version of herself or risk exposure. But when something dangerous starts possessing the students, she finds herself standing at the same crossroads she tried to run away from: risking her life to save others or living life to save herself. [Not clear what "living life to save herself" means.] [In what way is her life at risk if she saves others? We need to know what's possessing the students. "Something dangerous" is vague to the extreme.]
PLANET WEIRD is middle grade fiction complete at 45,000 words. Thank you for your time and consideration; I look forward to hearing from you.
Are Wanderers all from Andromeda or is that a term for any aliens?
So Earthlings have to complete the 8th grade to become citizens of their own planet? And Wanderers aren't allowed to become Earth citizens even if they live here and complete the eighth grade? Not very enlightened of future us.
This is all setup. We know Drixoral is an Andromedan disguised as an Earthling, and her fellow students are possessed. What does she do? What can she do? Is everyone on Earth threatened? Does the fact that Drowsoral isn't possessed mean she is immune to this possession? If she has the power to save the other students, does that mean the other Wanderers, the ones who aren't in disguise, also have this power?
If aliens can disguise themselves to look like Earthlings, wouldn't we have tests to make sure we aren't being fooled? Wouldn't we at least check to see if there's any record of Draz completing the 7th grade? If a Wanderer disguised as an Earthling completes 8th grade, wouldn't we demand to see her birth certificate, social security card, blood color before declaring her a citizen?