Guess the Plot
The Space Between
1. An Oakland detective and her estranged husband, a state Fish and Game biologist, team up to prevent the poisoning of the San Francisco reservoirs.
2. The first manned expedition to Alpha Centauri knew they would face unimaginable challenges when they landed in another galaxy. What they weren't prepared for was the perils that they had to overcome in the space between.
3. This user-friendly introduction to sketching explains the principle of negative space: drawing what isn't there, rather than what is.
4. Simon struggles to overcome the chilling effect of his unemotional upbringing, and learn to bridge the space between himself and others with the help of his high-school drama teacher and classmates.
5. Stranded on a desert island with two men, Margaret must choose between them; the bad news: one is an actor and the other is a car salesman.
6. Emily thought it was bad when she lived in Florida and Chuck lived in California; now Chuck's on the first manned flight to Mars.
Dear Ms. Agent,
There is no hard and fast rule dictating that one must know everything about relationships by the age of fifty. We all learn, change and grow until the day we die. Sometimes we get a second chance to find happiness. Sometimes we feel that it’s wrong to accept such a gift. [Sometimes we can be such morons.]
Margaret and Jeff mark their twenty-fifth anniversary with a once in a lifetime trip to New Zealand. Their marriage had become overshadowed by jealousy and mistrust, and Margaret hopes that this journey will revive their sinking marriage. [Jeff, on the other hand, is hoping for the opportunity to push Margaret into the fires of Mount Doom.] Her hopes come to a crashing halt when the aircraft encounters a violent storm and is wrecked in the South Pacific. [Sinking marriage? Crashing halt? Let Evil Editor do the jokes, please.] [Okay, it's either Lost, Cast Away, Survivor, or Gilligan's Island.]
Margaret’s husband Jeff perishes beneath the waves with the other passengers. [It's Cast Away.] She is left alone with [two volleyballs that she fantasizes are] David, a mature actor, and Mitch, a car salesman who attempts to seduce her. [On a floating piece of aircraft wreckage.] [Your jet crashes into the ocean, and immediately you start putting the moves on the only female survivor? Unbelieva-- Oh he's a car salesman. Never mind.] She resists Mitch’s violent advances, and David is forced to defend her, resulting in Mitch’s disappearance. [Sharks got him. If only they'd crashed somewhere near an island.] [Evil editor would buy the book, just to see a car salesman get eaten by sharks.]
Margaret’s world with Jeff had faded to black and white, but the first blush of colour returns as she and David meet the challenges of survival. [The first of which is to find an island before they drown.] Their new world is brutal, but they have opportunities to discover its beauty as well. [For instance, they see some very colorful tropical fish every time they go under.]
Their experience naturally pulls them together, but they resist. David is convinced that he is competing with Jeff’s ghost. He also feels the guilt of being attracted to another woman, imagining that his young second wife is frantic with worry in Los Angeles and ignoring the fact that she had been slipping away from him for some time. [Worst of all, his arms are getting really tired from treading water.] Margaret, while still emerging from her unhappy marriage, rediscovers her own dormant sensuality but refuses to be a catalyst to end another relationship, flawed or not.
They are rescued [by Captain Nemo,] [by Little Nemo,] [by Jeff Probst,] [by three dolphins and a sea tortoise under the control of Prince Namor, the Sub-Mariner,] and return to their respective homes, feeling the shadow of their own failed relationships. They attempt to resume their former lives, but they discover that their shared experience has changed them both. [They're both now madly in love. With Jeff Probst.]
It takes an island to begin their journey, [What?! There was an island?] but it takes the efforts of loving friends and family at home to finish it. [Finish it how? Do they get together?]
The Space Between, my first novel of approximately 53,000 words, is a contemporary romance, and may suit Mills & Boone's revamped Harlequin Romance line, but it is up to you to determine its suitability. Upon further inspection you may find that it is not only a romance. It touches on subjects like self esteem, body image, the approach of middle age, independence and spousal issues.
I hope that this brief [Brief?!!] description of my work will encourage you to request a further sample of my writing. I thank you for your time, and look forward to hearing from you. This is a multiple submission.
Dear Ms. Agent,
Sometimes we get a second chance to find happiness. And sometimes we foolishly pass up this gift.
Margaret and Jeff mark their twenty-fifth anniversary with a trip to New Zealand. Margaret hopes that this journey will revive their marriage, burdened of late by jealousy and mistrust. Her hopes come to a crashing halt when the aircraft encounters a violent storm and is wrecked near a South Pacific island.
Margaret’s husband Jeff perishes beneath the waves with most of the other passengers. She is left alone with David, another survivor. As she and David meet the challenges of survival, their experience naturally pulls them together, but David feels guilt, imagining that his wife, who had been slipping away from him, is frantic with worry. Margaret rediscovers her own dormant sensuality but refuses to be a catalyst to end another relationship, flawed or not.
Eventually they are rescued and return to their homes, feeling the shadow of their own failed relationships. As they resume their former lives, they discover that their shared experience has changed them both. So David dumps his wife and takes Margaret to New Zealand where they live happily ever after.
The Space Between is a 53,000-word contemporary romance that touches on issues of self-esteem, body image, independence, and the approach of middle age. I hope that this brief description of my work will encourage you to request a further sample of my writing. Thank you.
As the car salesman disappears anyway, Evil Editor removed him from the query. His seduction attempt was a bit jarring, considering the circumstances.
Does anything happen between them on the island? Does anything happen between them after they get back? Is there any romance in this romance? It wasn't clear.