Guess the Plot
Toni Valentine's Rent-a-Boy Service
1. Need the lawn mowed? Dog crap collected? Garage cleaned? Stuck with her dead sister's five sons, Toni decides she might as well make use of them.
2. At the Winston Academy for Girls, the demand for dependable male meat is high and Toni Valentine is ready to provide the supply. Plus, running her own successful business pretty much guarantees an "A" in economics.
3. Toni has the perfect moneymaking idea: renting strapping young men out for menial tasks like lawn care, snow shovelling, and fulfilling the prom dreams of ugly girls. But there are a few kinks in the Redbox-like kiosks she designed. For starters, she probably should have drilled some air holes.
4. Shelley thought renting boys out to girls who could never score a date a good way to boost her allowance. Then the drug companies started paying her big bucks for healthy young guinea pigs. Will the boys fight back, or is therapeutic marijuana just too attractive?
5. Grant told Leslie that he was a single dad, raising Brian after his wife died. Only problem: he's never been married and has no kids. Solution: Toni Valentine's Rent-A-Boy! When Leslie meets his wonderful 'son', she's sure to hop in the sack.
6. Tommy Valentine and his buddies are terrific at mowing and raking, but none of them has a lick of business sense. When Bobby's meddling sister Toni takes over their marketing, her ambiguous blurb on Craigslist lands them jobs they never imagined.
Dear Evil Editor:
Meet Tonya Valentine, tomboy to the core. Toni understands boys, seeing as she practically is one, choosing burp competitions over shopping and video games over manicures. [Hey, you don't have to be a tomboy to prefer video games to manicures, not when they're making video games for girls these days. For instance, this site has such games as Laundry Day, Belle's Beauty Boutique, and Super Shopping.] and So when she's forced to attend an all-girls school her senior year, she's not exactly peeing her basketball shorts from excitement. [Peeing from excitement is considered a girly thing. If you want to convey her tomboyness, it should be she doesn't exactly have a hard-on from excitement.]
At least she's still got her guys on the weekends, but Toni feels like her absence during the week is pushing her out of the group. When she stumbles across the broken-hearted Emma Elizabeth Swanson III crying in the stairwell at her new school, freshly dumped by her boyfriend, Toni figures out a way to merge her old life with her new one. She offers up Micah, her best friend, as a fake date to make Emma's ex-boyfriend jealous. [That plan will never work.]
When the plan works, [Okay, I was wrong. For once.] Toni is inspired to start up a Rent-a-Boy service at her new school. Need a fake date? Rent a boy. Need a guy to piss off the parents? Rent a boy. [Need a male to take your math and science tests? Rent a boy.] [Ba dum ching.] In a place like the Winston Academy for Girls, the demand for dependable male meat is high and Toni Valentine is ready to provide the supply, with a few rules of course, number one being: 1) No sex stuff. NOT THAT KIND OF SERVICE! [If you promote your service with phrases like "depend- able male meat," your customers are going to accuse you of false advertising if they don't get sex stuff.]
When Micah turns into the most popular product, [I'm deeply offended by your calling boys "meat" and "products." Boys may be insensitive clods, but they're people.] Toni discovers she may have feelings for him. Too bad he's got his eye on Emma. Turns out, Toni doesn't understand boys at all. Not one bit.
Toni Valentine's Rent-a-Boy Service is a contemporary YA novel complete at 56,000 words. Thank you again for your time and consideration!
If your customers want sex stuff, can you really expect your high school-boy employees to deny them?
I certainly hope Micah ends up with sweet Emma, and not with that mercenary, Toni. Otherwise I'll be throwing the book against the wall.
It sounds like it would be a cute story, possibly to a somewhat younger crowd than high school upperclassmen.
It's not clear how Toni's business solves her problem of feeling left out on weekdays, as she wouldn't be going along on the fake dates. In fact, most of the girls would want to rent boys on the weekend, which would further reduce the time Toni gets to spend with her boy-friends.