GARWAF is set in the Middle Ages, a time when handsome knights, damsels in distress and Big Bad Wolfs [Wolfs?] roamed the countryside. In this story, though, the handsome knight is the Big Bad Wolf, not to mention the one in dire distress.
GABRIEL was once the bravest knight in the land- before the woman he loved cursed him. Reduced to naught but a beast, Gabriel is trapped as a wolf with only the limits of his forest as a boundary from the human world that has cast him off. [Does being turned into a wolf by one woman equate with being cast off by the entire human world?] Gabriel knows if he stays a wolf much longer, he will lose his mind.
ISABEAU [isn't a beau.] (Beau) is a noblewoman who would rather discuss classical literature with a man than listen to his war stories or let him make love to her. She is all set to disappear into a convent [She won't be discussing classical literature with many men in a convent.] when an uncanny wolf tumbles into her life, giving her a reason to stay in the secular world and, perhaps, a chance at love. [I'm not letting any man make love to me, but I must admit, this wolf is quite the hunk.]
REYNARD is a ruthless knight with a nasty temper and a penchant for violence. Having helped his new wife, ALISON, betray her first husband, Gabriel, this villain is not pleased when tidings reach him of the wolf. [Is Gabriel the only wolf in the kingdom? Unless he's a talking wolf, I don't see how Reynard can assume it's Gabriel.] Reynard will lose everything if Sir Gabriel ever appears again as anything other than a wolf.
[Messenger: Sir Reynard, the king has captured a wolf.
Reynard: Hmm. Was it wearing armor and carrying a sword?]
Gabriel and Beau are initially drawn to one another after the king finds the wolf while hunting. Gabriel tries to avoid Beau, having vowed never to trust a woman again after what his wife did to him. Stress and loneliness take their toll, and Gabriel becomes all wolf, a danger to everyone around him. Beau is the only one able to pull him out of it. After this incident, Gabriel grows to love Beau. He longs to declare himself to Beau- even as he knows he cannot. [You call him Gabriel even when he's a wolf. Who's Garwaf?]
Reynard drives a wedge between the two by convincing Beau that Gabriel is still in love with Alison. Heart-broken, Beau flees and Reynard follows her with evil intent. [Some guy somehow manages to keep a straight face while telling you that the wolf you're in love with is in love with another woman, and you flee? How would Reynard know which woman the wolf loves?] The wolf thwarts him, but not before Beau is injured. Enraged, Gabriel returns to his old home and confronts Alison. She tells Gabriel how he can regain his humanity and with the coming of the dawn he is human again. [Apparently the cure was administered overnight; I guess Beau wasn't the only woman who found the wolf hunky.] He kills Reynard in a duel and rides with all haste to claim Beau as his bride. They are married at the end of the novel and live happily ever after.
I would think that in medieval times, if you land a guy who's not a plague-ridden, toothless, rag-wearing hunchback, you'd never let him go. Yet Alison is married to the bravest knight in the land and dumps him for a ruthless knight with a nasty temper and a penchant for violence?
And where did she get the ability to turn people into wolves? What is she?
Reynard must always be a fox in literature. Does he exhibit fox-like characteristics?
Someone started it and it caught on, but I've never been big on capitalizing character names.
This has the same format as the previous synopsis, A little about each character followed by no more plot than I'd get in a query letter. Why not work the character info into something with a narrative flow, i.e.
GABRIEL was the bravest knight in the land--until his wife Alison cursed him, trapping his now-fading mind in the body of a wolf. While hunting in the forest, the king finds the wolf and has it brought to his castle, where he entrusts its care to Isabeau, a noblewoman. Isabeau has grown so weary of men and their boring war stories, she's about ready to enter a convent. But this wolf intrigues her; he seems almost human.
Gabriel and Beau are initially drawn to one another, but Gabriel has vowed never to trust a woman again after what his wife did to him. Besides, he's a wolf. Stress and loneliness take their toll, and Gabriel's humanity ebbs. Beau is the only one able to pull him out of his wolfiness. He longs to declare himself to Beau- even as he knows he cannot.
REYNARD, a ruthless knight with a penchant for violence, has married Alison. Having helped her betray Gabriel, Reynard is not pleased when tidings reach him of the wolf. Reynard will lose everything if Sir Gabriel ever regains human form.
This gets your character profiles in, but also takes you through part of the plot, leaving you plenty of room to embellish those paragraphs and to develop the last paragraph, which moves too fast from event to event. You can tell us how Gabe is returned to manliness, add some details about the duel, etc, and still come in under 400 words.