Sunday, September 02, 2007
Guess the Plot
I Close My Eyes
1. Insomniacs the world over will hail this manual of simple first-person instructions designed to aid in obtaining a good night's sleep.
2. At the dentist. When I meditate. On the beach. While having sex. When using toilet paper. When driving on the Interstate. In the laundry room. Right after I slump into my grave after spending hours as a Walking Dead.
3. Morgan is thrilled to find that alcohol gets rid of her nightmares and guilt feelings and helps her make new friends. But when she ends up in the emergency room, she joins AA. And, miraculously, her life changes for the worse.
4. Dating Neil, the bass player in a struggling band, hadn't been much fun for Lisa so she moved on. Now they've got a hit song based on Lisa and Neil's breakup. Will she go back to the rock & roll life now that the band is hot?
5. Allyson forgets her broken engagement and moves back to West Virginia to settle her mother's estate. Entranced by the magnificent view from her mother's bedroom, she can't understand why the blinds were always drawn--until she spies her neighbor, Evil Editor, skinny dipping in the moonlight.
6. Katie Mack closes her eyes whenever she sees trouble ahead, like a car rushing toward her, a tree limb falling toward her, a pelican flying overhead. So when West Palm Beach asked Katie to monitor their elections, she closed her eyes and said, "Yes." She hasn't opened them since.
Dear Evil Editor,
Being a teenager is confusing enough without feeling responsible for her father's death. Morgan accidentally discovers alcohol relieves her feelings of guilt, banishes the nightmares and helps her gain new friends. [Now that's original--a pro-alcohol book.] But it doesn't stop there.
What starts out as a way to feel normal soon becomes the underlying cause of trips to the hospital emergency room, alcoholic blackouts and the resurgence of the nightmares. Her tool for coping with life becomes her biggest life problem. [Now she needs a tool to cope with her tool. Which reminds me of the time I had roaches in my house and someone told me that rats eat roaches. So I brought in some rats, and they did eat the roaches, but then I couldn't get rid of the rats, so I brought in some king cobras. Which worked fine, but . . . well, to make a long story short, does anyone know how to get rid of mongooses?]
Morgan reluctantly agrees to attend AA meetings. The nightmares get worse, [Hey, reading the 12 steps is enough to give anyone nightmares.] her best friend attempts suicide and Morgan's feelings of guilt return. [Now that's original--an anti-AA book.] Should she kill herself, drink again or choose sobriety by attending AA and doing what is suggested at the meetings? [She's already trying AA, I thought. Doesn't she have a sponsor to help her answer this question?] [In view of the benefits of AA so far, I would hope she comes up with a fourth choice.]
I am seeking representation for I Close My Eyes, a 20,650 word YA novel. It is loosely based on my own experiences as a teenage alcoholic. It explores what life looks like from inside the head of a teenage alcoholic from the first drink, through the insanity of alcoholism to recovery, relapse and the choices a recovering alcoholic faces. [The reason it's such a short book is because I don't remember three fourths of what went on back then.]
Thank you for taking the time to consider my novel.
This is too short to be called a novel. It'll probably be about 80 pages. If you can't remember anything else interesting, try making something up. Novels are supposedly fiction, after all.
You must explain why she feels guilty about her father's death. There's a big difference between leaving her roller skate at the top of the staircase and emptying a Glock into his head while he sleeps.
Morgan is a teen with a drinking problem is all this amounts to. Some more plot would be nice. Is she in the hospital because of a car accident? Liver transplant? Is there another key character you can bring in?