Friday, April 08, 2011
Guess the Plot
1. It's been Alia's lifelong dream to join the Baad Opera Company, but when she finally arrives in Germany, she discovers all is not well. The divas are divided, the leading men are striding confidently towards cliffs, and the choreographer thinks everything's a chore. Can Alia stop the Baad Company turning into the Bad Company? Or should she just echappe?
2. Roland's new friend, Chico, owns a modest pot farm. Roland agrees to partner with him only if he keeps everything low-key, but the infusion of cash fuels Chico's creativity. Soon Chico's Pot-o'-Gold Choco-Nuggets take off in popularity. Sheriff Roy Townsend intends to follow the tie-dyed rainbow back to the pot.
3. Teen cheerleader Lola Jaffe adores Bob Wright, but her parents are the most repressive people in Florida. Lola must sneak out whenever she wants to smoke pot with Bob in the grass behind the shed. Then one night he decides to pee in the canal and a giant alligator eats him! Accused of his murder, Lola has only one choice: frame her arch-nemesis -- that bitch, Tiffany!
4. What could bring a two-bit criminal like Matt Layman to shoot three cops, rob a bank and use his new-found notoriety to start a popular revolution against the oppressive state? Could it be his manic obsession with British rock 'n' roll supergroup . . . Bad Company?
5. Ben Franklin has a famous saying about house guests and fish that these people do not understand at all. When Joe Greenwell invited his cousin’s family to stay with him while they visited London, he didn’t know they were moving in. Now 6 months later there are 3 adults, 2 children, a large dog and a colony of constantly reproducing gerbils in his one-bedroom flat.
6. When its eighty-dollar-a-share stock fell ninety percent during the recession, Martin Drew bought up fifty-one percent of Consolidated Industries. Now the economy has recovered, but thanks to lazy employees, corrupt management, and bad PR from pollution scandals, CI is down to two cents a share and Martin is living in a refrigerator box. How was he to know it really was a . . . Bad Company?
Dear Mr Evil Editor
I am seeking representation for my science fiction novel Bad Company, complete at 110,000 words.
Matt Layman would do anything to protect his younger brother, including shooting the three police troopers who come to arrest them on trumped-up charges. Now the brothers are on the run, [And this time the charges aren't trumped up.] but in Xenos's underground cities, there isn't far they can go.
A post office withdrawal at gunpoint is a necessity: they're out of cash. Robbing a bank on the space station could be the start of class war. [You just said there wasn't far they could go in the underground cities of Xenos, and suddenly they can make it to a space station? What would constitute making it far? Getting to another galaxy?] For Matt plans to use his new-found notoriety to incite the oppressed populace into rising against the authorities. Or maybe it's just two delinquents looking for cover. [That's pretty much what it sounds like.]
Notoriety has its problems--instant recognition, larger price on his head, more resources devoted to his capture--and Matt's scheme might be too ambitious for him to handle. After all, a two-bit criminal can never become a national hero. [Spoiler alert.] Unless he's dead. [He's a zombie? And you wait till the last sentence to tell us?]
Thank you for your time.
Matt would be a more sympathetic character if we had more information about the government's oppression, and less about Matt's murders and armed robberies. What are they charging him with, and why are they trumping up charges against him when he's a two-bit crook who has yet to formulate any plans to overthrow them?
Make Matt a street vendor instead of a criminal and set it in Tunisia instead of Xenos, and I think you might have something here.
A hint of why this is science fiction (other than the cities are underground for some reason) might help. Robbing a post office at gunpoint sounds more like a western than science fiction.