Guess the Plot
1. In a nation that seems to believe, irrationally, that guns somehow prevent violence, the Judas Pistol, a trick gun that shoots the person firing it, may be the only way to restore sanity.
2. I work 1st century; I’m a time cop. Centurions say Iscariot hanged himself--talk about your cold cases--but the discovery of a stash with thirty pieces of tarnished silver and six corroded cartridges tells me Judas was the victim of a ride-by camelback shooting.
3. Les and his assistant Gunz help historical societies with the investigation of old battle sites. Of course, investigating whether Judas was pistol whipped during the Roman-Persian wars isn't the greatest gig, so when some elderly lawmen ask the guys to investigate a more recent gunfight, they jump at the chance.
4. When a wealthy gun collector is found stabbed to death in the middle of his looted vault, Detective Zack Martinez knows two things: he's looking for a killer with a finely honed sense of irony, and there's no way in hell he's going to fire something called a "Judas Pistol."
5. When Carrie's vegetarian meet and greet is crashed by cannibals, she calls on her brother's garage band to help--only to find they've been abducted by a cult of treacherous time-traveling aliens. Also, a gun metaphor.
6. Archeologist Gary Davis is approached by a strange woman
in Jerusalem, and soon learns her secret. She has a box, with a gun in
it--the gun used to kill Jesus. Now the Vatican is after him, and he may
need that gun.
JUDAS PISTOL is an 81,000-word amateur sleuth mystery set in the gun culture of 2001 Montana.
Les Huntsman returns from the Gulf War totally deaf, unable to continue teaching history. [Why would a history teacher need to be able to hear? Everyone in his class is asleep.] Instead, he competes in handgun tournaments to augment private investigations of old battle sites for historical societies and other clients--such as a committee of elderly lawmen, who provide helpers and point Les to a more recent gunfight investigation being mishandled by local police.
[Lawman 1: This investigation is being mishandled. We should step in.
Lawman 2: Us? But we're not as young as we used to be.
Lawman 3: True. Hey, that deaf guy in the handgun tournament looks pretty young.]
D’arcy is another former teacher with challenges. In a wheelchair, she runs a private communication service, including interpretation for the deaf. [I see where this is going. A team of superheroes. The deaf guy will call himself Vangoh. The woman is known as The Paraplegic.]
On loan to the pair is Gunz, a rookie deputy considered slow [Instead of Gunz, we'll call him Moose, an homage to the slow guy in Archie comics. Make that The Moose. We don't want to get sued.] and mostly a go-for at the sheriff’s office. The trio quickly clears two law-enforcement suspects who were also victims of the shooting, and the search for the real killer or killers begins amid multiple murders. [Brilliant. Before they begin searching for the real killers they clear the killers' victims? This team isn't going anywhere unless they can recruit Daredevil to be their leader.] [I wonder who decides which superhero is the leader. In the Fantastic Four, the leader is the guy who can stretch. I mean, come on! Stretching is his power? In the X-Men the leader is the guy in the wheelchair. Apparently the most pitiful superhero has to be the leader because no one else wants the job. That probably means the leader of the Justice League would be Aquaman or Green Arrow. But no! Someone asked that question on Yahoo Answers and the response chosen as best answer was: "as far as i know, superman is the leader of them because when you look at their pictures with the justice league, superman is always at the front with batman and wonderwoman in his sides...."]
[Is there anything the Justice League can do that Superman couldn't do all by himself?
Superman: I'll take out that division of tanks and super robots; Green Arrow, you shoot that little guy on the left.
Aquaman: What about me?
Superman: You prepare the after-battle seafood buffet.]
Roots of the crime spree are exposed as dirty city officials and killers-for-hire to protect a small-town bank’s money-laundering scheme. [Not the clearest of sentences.] The killers harbor agendas of their own, [What are their agendas?] leading a chase along northern Montana’s border and central mountains. [Topic for discussion: Who is considered to be leading a chase: the one being chased or the chaser who's closest to the one being chased or the leader of the team doing the chasing?]
I’m a former English teacher with a bachelor of science from Eastern Montana College and a master and doctorate of arts from Idaho State University. I served in the U.S. Army, Montana National Guard, and National Rifle Association over fifty years as a firearms instructor. [In short, this is autobiographical, except that I taught English instead of history and I don't really have super powers.]
JUDAS PISTOL is my first novel, manuscript immediately available via e-mail or U.S. Postal Service mail at your request.
Separately, a deaf guy, a stupid guy and a woman in a wheelchair can accomplish great things. Put them all together and they have as much chance of solving this case as the Keystone Cops.
For starters, it would be hard to choose a leader, as all of them have the required unimpressive powers:
Gunz: I shud be the leader cause she's in a wheelchair and yer deaf.
What happened to Vangoh, The Moose, and The Paraplegic? They disappeared from the query. Are they the ones chasing the killers across Montana? I'd try focusing the whole thing on Les. The others don't do anything in the query.
Some clarity about what's going on would help. You mention a gunfight in which apparently two people were killed, additional multiple murders, a money laundering bank, a crime spree, killers for hire... and it's up to the deaf guy, paraplegic and gofer to deal with all that?