Sunday, October 29, 2006
New Beginning 666 (Anonymous Submission)
It was the best of times, it was the worst of times, it was the age of wisdom, it was the age of foolishness, it was the epoch of belief, it was the epoch of incredulity, it was the season of Light, it was the season of Darkness, it was the spring of hope, it was the winter of despair, we had everything before us, we had nothing before us, we were all going direct to Heaven, we were all going direct the other way.
And so while posing as the leader of the French Revolution, the agent secretly dashed off hundreds of form letter rejections, crushing the hopes of wannabe writers across the continent. Until he was crushed by the foot of a giant eunuch.
Opening: Dickens.....Continuation: Anon.
comment 1, by Hawkowl: I knew after the first character of the first word that this was the worst example of writing I've ever seen. Way too predictable. This writer will never warrant any attention.
comment 2 by Egghead: The only way this could work is to be in present tense, third person POV.
comment 3 by Dave: Too many words. Eliminate every "the." And we get the point after the first sentence. Cut the other garbage.
comment 4 by Rammer: The only way this could work is to be in past tense, first person POV.
comment 5 by White Mouse: The author doesn't know where to start the story. Where's the tension? Where's the conflict? Isn't there a car chase that would make a better starting point?
comment 6 by radicalfeministpoet: Damn surgeons, they should all be killed.
comment 7 by Bunny Girl: Way too much description. Just show me already!
comment 8 by Braun: Way too little description. Just tell me already!
comment 9 by Kate Thornton: Great continuation. The continuation was great. Did I mention that it was a pretty good continuation?