tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post961154435033277246..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: New Beginning 987Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-63178911532855818892013-01-08T22:02:29.281-05:002013-01-08T22:02:29.281-05:00I don't know anything you can't find on th...I don't know anything you can't find on the websites like Query Tracker.<br /><br />Carol Mann is a member of AAR. Her list of clients include many best selling authors -- most of them write nonfiction. I have half a shelf of books by one of her clients -- he's written over twenty and all of them are NYT best sellers.<br /><br />I'd guess Carol Mann wouldn't take on a new agent who couldn't do a good job. Also, if she is new, she won't be too busy with existing clients.Mister Furkleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07156977719916770984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-40808507373929254712013-01-08T16:40:12.647-05:002013-01-08T16:40:12.647-05:00Congrats on the full request, AA. I know nothing a...Congrats on the full request, AA. I know nothing about that agent, but I think you should take the question to absolute write and post it anonymously. <br /><br />(Or, more than likely, there'll already be a thread at AW discussing the agent.)AlaskaRavenclawnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-43652888772445229242013-01-08T10:04:45.428-05:002013-01-08T10:04:45.428-05:00Thanks for your comments, all. I received a reques...Thanks for your comments, all. I received a request for a full from Myrsini Stephanides at Carol Mann. Anybody know her? Have any personal experience with CMA?<br />Thanks. AAA. Andersonnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-52915635674373840442013-01-08T09:04:00.260-05:002013-01-08T09:04:00.260-05:00Yeah, I figured someone would make that remark abo...Yeah, I figured someone would make that remark about suspension of disbelief, but I also figured that any writer will understand that the everyday details are exactly what you DO have to get right if you want your readers to accept vampires etc.<br /><br />Eg, a vampire senator who feeds on the blood of lobbyists at a firm on J St in DC would never work: everyone knows there is no J St in DC. AlaskaRavenclawnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-84991300736733373382013-01-07T22:16:07.306-05:002013-01-07T22:16:07.306-05:00My guess is that CA school systems archive their r...My guess is that CA school systems archive their records on a regular schedule just like any business or government agency. You might have a hacker break into the archive and remove all records of Lauren. That is more believable. Even if a fire destroyed all records, wouldn't that be public knowledge throughout the education systems from k12 to the universities?<br /><br />You can’t expect readers to suspend such disbelief. I mean, walking dead people, vampires and werewolves are believable but a school fire burning up records? It’s simply too much.<br />Mister Furkleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07156977719916770984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-45992231578066827322013-01-07T14:54:17.391-05:002013-01-07T14:54:17.391-05:00I like the idea and the tone. I've been waitin...I like the idea and the tone. I've been waiting to post, to see if others had the issue I had. It seems no one does but I'll throw it out there anyway:<br /><br />My willing suspension of disbelief got snagged at the outset because no hopeful student would really write such an essay. Instead, they'd try like hell, pardon the expression, to hide their situation from the admissions committee. They'd say they were homeschooled, or had just emigrated from a country where the infrastructure has been bombed into the Stone Age. (I have had students who actually had the latter problem, and it *does* screw up transcripts).<br /><br />Anyway, if that doesn't snag anyone else, don't worry about it, I guess. Seems good otherwise.AlaskaRavenclawnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-35581419344603901852013-01-07T13:39:05.722-05:002013-01-07T13:39:05.722-05:00Is this going to be a complete epistolary story or...Is this going to be a complete epistolary story or are you going to switch it to a more standard narrative in a later segment? <br /><br />I wouldn't write as many words but that is style in this case. I won't say cut, cut, cut...<br />Truthfully, I would gut the second paragraph from "Every hard copy" to "You might say." I think those sentences belong after the great line: "All I have is the story I’m about to tell." <br /><br />This certainly gets the reader's attention. Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18217202416002233005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-54352545630074806222013-01-07T13:05:28.124-05:002013-01-07T13:05:28.124-05:00A Faustino dealing with a devil? Who's ever he...A Faustino dealing with a devil? Who's ever heard of such a thing? ^_^<br /><br />I'd probably read on, although with the hopes that the entire novel isn't in the form of a college admissions essay.150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-9853826165516690022013-01-07T12:15:29.373-05:002013-01-07T12:15:29.373-05:00I liked this very much - including the naked sente...I liked this very much - including the naked sentence (am a reader, not an editor, so weigh the votes accordingly). <br /><br />In the first paragraph I thought the tone slightly jarring and annoying (because obviously it doesn't match an admissions essay) but the voice is strong and by the end of the second paragraph I'd forgotten that quibble and was just interested in reading on. Mission accomplished.Tknoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-36029822758799015732013-01-07T11:26:02.641-05:002013-01-07T11:26:02.641-05:00Here's what I would do:
Sentence 3, change to...Here's what I would do:<br /><br />Sentence 3, change to set the record straight, and end the paragraph there.<br /><br />Start the 2nd paragraph: I’m Lauren Faustino, and until last semester... <br /><br />Delete: Thus I stand before you naked, Dear Admissions People, bureaucratically speaking. Formless, you might say. <br /><br />Change the last sentence to something like: All that remains of my academic career is the story I’m about to tell.<br /><br />And you're good to go. It would be interesting to know whether the entire book is the story she's about to tell, or just the first chapter.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.com