tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post7275189636688322596..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 1065Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-65544679992298643902012-08-17T16:03:53.943-04:002012-08-17T16:03:53.943-04:00Is the idea to query this at places other than the...Is the idea to query this at places other than the prequel's publisher? If yes, you must mention the prequel and its sales numbers.150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-75019038250481370232012-08-17T15:02:11.301-04:002012-08-17T15:02:11.301-04:00It comes off a little ho-hum. To me the most inter...It comes off a little ho-hum. To me the most interesting story point is Zach losing his longtime possessing spirit, but you only mention this in the context of how it affects Zach's business. If he's been haunted for years, it seems he ought to have some kind of emotional connection to this ghost, either positive or negative. How does he feel, and what steps is he going to take to either save or get rid of his spirit for good? If he's been possessed, is his personality changing in front of his increasingly-suspicious team, or do they already know about this and are worried for him?<br /><br />I would drop the sentence about the black ice, unless you can link it more directly to the haunting. Traffic accidents are pretty typical, malevolent hauntings are not.<br /><br />Also, I would change the second sentence to either "former property of a mass murderer" or "the location of a mass murder." Otherwise, the pronoun implies that the property belongs to a mass murder.sarahhawthornenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-42906302032764338632012-08-17T13:58:52.937-04:002012-08-17T13:58:52.937-04:00I agree with EE (only a fool would not) that the q...I agree with EE (only a fool would not) that the query lacks evidence of a haunting. <br />There’s nothing spooky or compelling in the query aside from the mention of Zach’s spirit not working just right. What’s going on at the farmhouse that should imperil the town and Zach’s team?<br />PLaFnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-35554344280582200672012-08-17T13:32:43.665-04:002012-08-17T13:32:43.665-04:00Sounds like the Amityville Horror.
You're ca...Sounds like the Amityville Horror. <br /><br />You're calling Atchison, Kansas, the most haunted town in America, so I'm off to teh Google, which shows me that the modest little burg only claims to be <i>one</i> of the most haunted towns in <i>Kansas</i>. I guess they don't want to get into any slugfests with other Kansas (heh) ghost-towns.<br /><br />How does the Atchison Horror threaten the whole town, and not just the family who bought the murder site? The connection's not clear. (Does Kansas have real estate disclosure laws, btw?)AlaskaRavenclawnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-83125376949194487942012-08-17T11:21:20.835-04:002012-08-17T11:21:20.835-04:00Thanks EE. Already worth the price of admission! I...Thanks EE. Already worth the price of admission! I look forward to minion comments/suggestions as well.Stephen Prosapiohttp://www.xavierparanormal.comnoreply@blogger.com