tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post5554994851523118096..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 529Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-4231060173066872652008-05-23T08:18:00.000-04:002008-05-23T08:18:00.000-04:00I always wondered what they did with all those kid...I always wondered what they did with all those kids caught cheeting on their exams...Bonniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07895569211498067204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-46608704326973790522008-05-21T21:01:00.000-04:002008-05-21T21:01:00.000-04:00Our local electric company had a huge illuminated ...Our local electric company had a huge illuminated sign atop one of its power plants:<B>ARIZONA PUB IC SERVICE.</B>talpiannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13978075304795724185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-53142141235314870762008-05-21T20:35:00.000-04:002008-05-21T20:35:00.000-04:00I'm stealing a political joke from Olberman while ...I'm stealing a political joke from Olberman while y'all are watching American IDOL. <BR/><BR/>Japan has named HELLO KITTY, the animated children's character as its tourism envoy to China and other parts of Asia. Stunned by the "tourism envoy gap," President Bush announced that Foghorn Leghorm will be the USA's envoy to Canada. <BR/><BR/>And yes, Pepe Le Pew will be envoy to France.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-83256498193262057102008-05-21T16:56:00.000-04:002008-05-21T16:56:00.000-04:00I've always maintained that there's a reason only ...I've always maintained that there's a reason only a single "L" separates 'pubic' & 'public'. <BR/><BR/>And I dare anyone who deals with the great unwashed to differ.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-18065182529024870702008-05-21T16:40:00.000-04:002008-05-21T16:40:00.000-04:00Confusing. Her parents start talking about sendin...Confusing. Her parents start talking about sending her to Cyborg school. Angel wants no part of it, but then all of a sudden before the end of that sentence she's not only in Cyborg school, but already suspects that something shady is going on there?<BR/><BR/>A lot happened in that sentence. Probably too much.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-79587658438457876742008-05-21T16:02:00.000-04:002008-05-21T16:02:00.000-04:00If you're going to bring up Asimov and JK Rowling ...If you're going to bring up Asimov and JK Rowling (a practice I'm not all that keen on for the reasons EE has expounded upon numerous times), you might as well throw in Wells...since all the half-human/half-cheetah made me think of was "The Island of Dr. Moreau." <BR/><BR/>I expect shop class in the pubic school would be the House of Pain.EBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14361825595951678685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-38815200306173628722008-05-21T15:14:00.000-04:002008-05-21T15:14:00.000-04:00The situation sounds very cool. Girl, friend, half...The situation sounds very cool. Girl, friend, half-cheetah; Cyborgs, mind control, a mystery; all for the YA market which is still hot. But the query doesn't yet show enough about the story or that you can tell a great tale. (My query was worse, so I know whereof I speak.)<BR/><BR/>I'd also drop the bit about Great Valley State or North Valley University (as it apparently is), because it doesn't add anything to your resume unless you're marketing to the alumni association of NVU. Just say you have a B.A. in creative writing, etc.pacatruehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04125048243775811714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-38003853185353761482008-05-21T14:53:00.000-04:002008-05-21T14:53:00.000-04:00Oh, and hilarious jokes EE. Truly top notch.Oh, and hilarious jokes EE. Truly top notch.nonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00415222406280230021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-8607692499471965512008-05-21T14:50:00.000-04:002008-05-21T14:50:00.000-04:00Any SF editor worth their salt will know this pain...Any SF editor worth their salt will know this <A HREF="http://against-the-day.pynchonwiki.com/wiki/images/thumb/b/b9/Khnopff.jpg/500px-Khnopff.jpg" REL="nofollow">painting</A>, too.nonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00415222406280230021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-19772609136884730192008-05-21T14:46:00.000-04:002008-05-21T14:46:00.000-04:00Evil are you on a roll today! I read the half-che...Evil are you on a roll today! <BR/><BR/>I read the half-cheetah and thought it was, like, a body chopped in half, bleeding out all over the floor...<BR/><BR/>Ditto what everyone else says here. This is setup with seriously unfortunate typos, poor grammar and zero plot. Perhaps you might read a few of the query shred fests that have come before yours, then reread the responses here before you revise, Author. Then tell us what your story is about. Sounds like it could be a decent YA read.writtenwyrddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02280711822302493122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-54311543968281418252008-05-21T13:02:00.000-04:002008-05-21T13:02:00.000-04:00There's a delightfully funny video on the web of G...There's a delightfully funny video on the web of Gary Kasparov (the former chess player and not politician) speaking and someone unleashes one of those toy helicopters with a dildo attached. <BR/><BR/>It's so hysterical to watch. And it's a BIG dildo.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-57635121456714761252008-05-21T12:30:00.000-04:002008-05-21T12:30:00.000-04:00You can learn so much in here. I never knew that d...You can learn so much in here. I never knew that dildos had scrotums or that they needed cosies to keep them warm.fairyhedgehoghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14141089706966852951noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-38752428534588598732008-05-21T12:23:00.000-04:002008-05-21T12:23:00.000-04:00Hey, I was re-reading. The author never called it...Hey, I was re-reading. The author never called it Sci-Fi, but they did call it YA. So everything I said was nonsense (but y'all already expect that from me)...<BR/><BR/>...dcAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-88574079645219928992008-05-21T12:19:00.000-04:002008-05-21T12:19:00.000-04:00This is cyberpunk (or has a huge chunk of cyberpun...This is cyberpunk (or has a huge chunk of cyberpunk elements) -- the mating of man and computer and the consequences to society. And it's considered sci-fi. consider Morgan's Takeshi Kovacs character who has an implant that allows his mind to be store and transmitted electronically and then restored into a new body. <BR/><BR/>Akira, Strange Days, The Matrix, A Scanner Darkly, Minority Report, those all have cyberpunk elements. <BR/><BR/>I can't add anything more to the comments about the query. <BR/><BR/>However as for the GTP's...<BR/>#1 - I always thought there was a Kincaid dungeon. <BR/>#5 - is the last name "Tigotheles" real in any way?Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-78695171978477046382008-05-21T12:12:00.000-04:002008-05-21T12:12:00.000-04:00Actually a pubic library is not far-fetched. A fe...Actually a pubic library is not far-fetched. A few years ago, the Boulder, Colorado public library hung a collection of 24 dildos in various colors with knitted cozies around the scrotums from the ceiling of the main entrance. I can't recall the purpose, but it had somethiing to do with the rainbow of diversity.<BR/><BR/>The library also refused to filter porn from the computers in the children's section.<BR/><BR/>Oh, well. Maybe it's just me. I've always been known as a fuddy-duddy. Fiddle-faddle.Weshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03077791761104576436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-74852750534510132102008-05-21T11:32:00.000-04:002008-05-21T11:32:00.000-04:00I don't mean this in a derogatory way but it doesn...I don't mean this in a derogatory way but it doesn't sound like science fiction to me. It sounds like YA/Middle grade where the main character happens to have a half-computer brain. [kind of like calling Stars Science fiction just because it has space ships]. The tone of the story as described just doesn't fit what I recognize as Science Fiction.<BR/><BR/>I think this is good news. Instead of limiting the querying to SF agents, I'd go more mainstream.<BR/><BR/>Just my dumb old two cents.<BR/><BR/>..dave coniferAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-71390213038330161942008-05-21T11:07:00.000-04:002008-05-21T11:07:00.000-04:00I'd imagine there's a very wide range of pubic hea...I'd imagine there's a very wide range of pubic health diversity.<BR/><BR/>But pubic libraries creep me out.<BR/><BR/>Thanks, author, you brightened all of our mornings ; )<BR/><BR/>I felt like this query had too many random elements. Half-cheetah friend? Where did that come from? You say public (well, okay, you *didn't* say public, but we're all hoping that's what you meant) school and I think bad lunches, recess, etc. So when you start listing off chimeras and English-impeded (what does that even mean?) robots, you lose me. Focus on background and development, and leave out details that are distracting.<BR/><BR/>Also, never, ever, EVER compare yourself to Rowling. Just don't.<BR/><BR/>But don't be too sad. I see a lot of potential in this--sci fi for younger readers isn't that common, and it sounds like it could be fun.Kiersten Whitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05780265683043033609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-11771928456393899152008-05-21T11:02:00.000-04:002008-05-21T11:02:00.000-04:00I agree with EE that the initial lecture and the R...I agree with EE that the initial lecture and the Rowling refs have to go.<BR/><BR/>It all sounds interesting, but to be fully persuaded I need to know more about your take on the cyborg/emotion issue. As it's written, I'm not getting beyond the cliches.<BR/><BR/>I'm always game for half-cheetae, but it would help to know who Angel's other best friend is. 'Human' is too vague. Ditto the 'somehow'of the illegal experimentation control. I <I>really</I> want you to tell me about that.Whirlochrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09846196906206886945noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-44483535301837024682008-05-21T10:52:00.000-04:002008-05-21T10:52:00.000-04:00"With her best friends, a human and a half-cheetah..."With her best friends, a human and a half-cheetah, at her side,"<BR/><BR/>Am I the only one wondering if someone's pulling our appendage?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com