tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post494691774442964862..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 1386Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-88202855772615868002018-12-10T09:08:58.096-05:002018-12-10T09:08:58.096-05:00Best to add ‘originally’ in the first sentence “....Best to add ‘originally’ in the first sentence “...clowns, originally formed...” <br /><br />Second paragraph reads smoother if the phrase ‘Pickled Punk tells the story of’ because it contributes nothing to the query. Might also add ‘alcoholic’ before clowns. Then end that sentence there: period.<br />Next sentence starts with ‘He learns...’ Because queries should consist usually and mostly of short sentences not compound multi-clause sentences. (I don’t know why but it seems to work better for a query.)<br /><br />I really like the idea of a society of clowns secretly trying to become Masters of the UniverseMister Furkleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07156977719916770984noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-85771751402437436222018-12-09T18:03:29.681-05:002018-12-09T18:03:29.681-05:00Obviously you're one of the many people who ar...Obviously you're one of the many people who are deathly afraid of clowns. A secret clown cabal infiltrating Denny's is funny.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-35880189416165166852018-12-09T17:53:25.855-05:002018-12-09T17:53:25.855-05:00The tone of the query doesn't suggest humor, a...The tone of the query doesn't suggest humor, absurdist, or anything even remotely funny. It sounds like a bizarre, drug-fueled mess that wants to be Hunter Thompson but doesn't even land on the same planet.<br /><br />Is there a way to convey humor in a query that doesn't make the book sound stupid?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04924156773749705263noreply@blogger.com