tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post4000973875794884006..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 819Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-64595698333494166902010-09-13T14:56:33.677-04:002010-09-13T14:56:33.677-04:00I like EE's revision/suggestions. Though if yo...I like EE's revision/suggestions. Though if you could keep the "And nobody messes with the dog" line, I'd be glad.<br /><br />This is on the short side, but it's got energy and good information. Flesh out the plot and I'd say you're good to go.<br /><br />If you land something with this query, let us know on the blog; I'd like to read it.<br /><br />You could try changing the title to "Nobody Messes with the Dog."_*rachel*_https://www.blogger.com/profile/03293167107180931700noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-2027686153466443712010-09-12T15:17:20.377-04:002010-09-12T15:17:20.377-04:00Maybe reduce 'galaxy' to 'solar system...Maybe reduce 'galaxy' to 'solar system'? While this could be fun, and Space Western is a nice light genre, I'm having the same mental stumble that I had with a previous query that had the characters marching over an entire planet. Planets are big. Galaxies are waaaaaaaaaay bigger. <br />I get that the lead bullets are a hommage to the Western roots - do they use ray-guns too?batgirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15143310557906978680noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-12044722444827702672010-09-11T21:10:25.693-04:002010-09-11T21:10:25.693-04:00I’m going for a 40’s serial, or rather, a serial-n...I’m going for a 40’s serial, or rather, a serial-nouveau type of undercurrent with the whole thing. So the fact that the names evoke that sort of thought from the get go doesn’t really bother me. (I don’t really understand the Isabella tangent there… Calli/Calliope isn’t a variation of the name, so I don’t know what you’re getting at, other than that popular books occasionally spur naming trends.)<br /><br />I did not see The Librarian – mostly because it looked like and Indiana Jones rip-off and I’ve seen enough of those to last a lifetime. But the inspiration for Flynn’s name came from Errol Flynn and Tron. Hopefully someday you’ll have the opportunity to read it in its entirety and judge the full picture… though it might be hard to find, since the title is definitely going through a redo.A. B. Keuserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15152107659542138178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-9139043456432562362010-09-11T01:01:56.729-04:002010-09-11T01:01:56.729-04:00I didn't mean that I absolutely positively did...I didn't mean that I absolutely positively didn't like the names. I just wasn't attracted to them. This past week we had two Isabella variations and ever since Twilight and possibly a few years before, female protagonists have been named Isabella variations. I keep meeting little girls named Isabella too and they don't have Italian heritages either. It's been the new Tiffany and Britney for a while. <br /><br />Flynn reminded me of Noah Wiley's character of The Librarian. Calliope is something I learned to play after organ and piano. And, Calliope Druthers reminds me of James Bond characters like Pussy Galore and Kissy Suzuki. All serviceable names but kinda 50's. <br /><br />I don't know enough of the story to express dislike. I know just enough to say "not fond"... But I would get over that if I read the entire novel.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-63623941051511706532010-09-10T22:41:01.861-04:002010-09-10T22:41:01.861-04:00Thanks for shredding as asked. I realize that I ha...Thanks for shredding as asked. I realize that I have a lot of work to do! I've never liked the title, but I didn’t realize that it would end up causing confusion, and Calliope is the antagonist in the novel while Flynn is the protagonist. First thing to go is that blasted title! And I guess I’ll end up doing a complete reworking of the query. Thanks again.<br /><br />And Dave F. I'm sorry you don't like my names, but I don’t think that Space Western and "Serious Drama" are synonymous.A. B. Keuserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15152107659542138178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-29114084886490736452010-09-10T18:22:48.033-04:002010-09-10T18:22:48.033-04:00Has potential. Would consider reading the EE versi...Has potential. Would consider reading the EE version. Good luck!Stephen Prosapiohttp://www.amazon.com/Dream-War-ebook/dp/B003VTZXAY/refnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-86469106080837599672010-09-10T17:21:53.497-04:002010-09-10T17:21:53.497-04:00This sounds to me that it is backstory to the real...This sounds to me that it is backstory to the real story. I'm confused by the two characters. The title made me think the novel was about Calliope Druthers but the opening name is Flynn Monroe and the story seems to be about his discovering a daughter he didn't know he had. Plus, I don't know if this is about galactic intrigue or a domestic father, daughter, estranged wife story. <br /><br />BTW, I'm not fond of the names Flynn Monroe and Calliope Druthers. They sound to me to be comedy names and not serious drama names.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-61320281629572793322010-09-10T13:07:16.908-04:002010-09-10T13:07:16.908-04:00Oops. Fix in progress.Oops. Fix in progress.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-33916738833857729392010-09-10T12:57:22.719-04:002010-09-10T12:57:22.719-04:00I was confused by the "hail of bullets and sh...I was confused by the "hail of bullets and shattered glass." Is it aimed at Calliope by Flynn? At Flynn by Calliope? At one or both of them by a third party? I assume the potential chest full of lead was from Flynn; does that mean Calliope was using his child (and hers?) as a human shield?<br /><br />Only five plots - EE, did you leave out the real one?Johnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03317745369702853183noreply@blogger.com