tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post1487702022724285851..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Feedback RequestEvil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-41289899585899610162022-01-14T10:32:39.360-05:002022-01-14T10:32:39.360-05:00Plot twist. At the end, Ra discovers, that he real...Plot twist. At the end, Ra discovers, that he really enjoys ice skating. <br /><br />Author, action in the desert has potential. Enter sand surfing. <br /><br />Actually, tbh, this has potential as a Netflix series, in the woods, or desert. I hope you nail this.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-5626014567458989942021-12-04T03:55:29.881-05:002021-12-04T03:55:29.881-05:00I love this plot idea. You can take some liberties...I love this plot idea. You can take some liberties, especially since it's a fantasy anyway - I'd put in as many connecting dots as possible, and probably address the change of setting in the query with a few words since that's a big deal. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-91379910367736967232021-11-24T23:45:40.057-05:002021-11-24T23:45:40.057-05:00Hey, thanks for your comments.
Yes, the base/colo...Hey, thanks for your comments.<br /><br />Yes, the base/colony is underground. It was hallowed out by these Atlantis-like humans, so it's a big cavern.<br /><br />You're right about cryogenics being used to preserve the hybrids. To be honest, I was uncertain over how I worded that. I'll be clearer. They were preserved rather than destroyed becuase the creators hoped that humans would one day find them/dissect them for scientific knowledge.<br /><br />The kids get stranded in the midst of the monsters rampaging across the forest, similiar to "Jurassic Park," but maybe that was a poor word choice.<br /><br />I am having some trouble effectively communicating this backstory. The creators had their original base in ancient Egypt, where they and the Egyptians struck a cordial alliance. But when these hybrids tried to take over, the creators left to a more remote corner of the world out of guilt. They brought the preserved hybrids with them.<br /><br />Sorry the forest setting doesn't work. I thought about setting the story in Egypt, but I just couldn't envision much action in a desert. Maybe that was a mistake...<br /><br />Minotaurs get mentioned. The implication is that creatures like Bigfoot, mermaids, fairies -- any hybrid monsters from folklore -- were actually spawned from these ancient lab experiments.<br /><br />Again, thanks for your thoughts.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05392044128258257372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-75001709787086345722021-11-24T13:53:03.999-05:002021-11-24T13:53:03.999-05:00'beneath the forest' -- Actually under the...'beneath the forest' -- Actually under the trees among their roots? We talking a cave/bunker or something? Is this a small, easily overlooked outpost or something massive?<br /><br />'faced imprisonment' -- I assume they were imprisoned/cryogenically frozen/something? And as EE said, why not just destroy them?<br /><br />'stranded' -- where? by what? <br /><br />A little confused-- the dead civilization in the forest created the hybrids, which then crossed half the world to enslave egypt and then their creators 'banished' them to the distant forest they originally came from where the creators are?????<br /><br />Juxtaposing egypt critters with forest doesn't work well for me, although it does seem to be part of what makes the story unique, so might work for others. Out of curiousity, do animal-headed creatures from other legends/mythology, the minotaur springs to mind, show up?<br /><br />good luckAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com