tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post116293650439282955..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 228Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-10690736171219849292008-09-27T22:48:00.000-04:002008-09-27T22:48:00.000-04:00Sorry, no idea.Sorry, no idea.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-47018577104375150412008-09-27T21:08:00.000-04:002008-09-27T21:08:00.000-04:00I think I know the author of 'Gasparila's Gold. Ho...I think I know the author of 'Gasparila's Gold. How do I get in touch with him?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163627218118384162006-11-15T16:46:00.000-05:002006-11-15T16:46:00.000-05:00braun, I hear what you're saying. The treasure in ...braun, I hear what you're saying. The treasure in the book is actually up on Amelia Island in the swamp area, but the protag is based in Neptune Beach. And being from the area, I can see how it may not be that mysterious to you, but it is tropical and scenic with a lot of history, and makes a pretty good setting for a mysterious thriller (I guess that's what I've written). Thanks for the comments. Peace.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163624013483245832006-11-15T15:53:00.000-05:002006-11-15T15:53:00.000-05:00Author:I'm not the one selling t-shirts in Neptune...Author:<BR/><BR/><I>I'm</I> not the one selling t-shirts in Neptune Beach. I'm just saying that if you <I>did</I>, you'd probably light up from time-to-time. <BR/><BR/>Anyways, while I'm sure there were pirates AND gold up and down the coast back in the day, at this point I'm betting it's all been either dug up by beach bums or paved over for high-rise condos.<BR/><BR/>I've lived within twenty minutes of the "First Coast" most of my life. I guess maybe it's just not mysterious enough for me to imagine it being loaded with hidden treasure. Mind you, the mysterious drifter, that I buy.braunhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00387344142594757730noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163558942087799552006-11-14T21:49:00.000-05:002006-11-14T21:49:00.000-05:00I do think I once had a girlfriend who regularly d...I do think I once had a girlfriend who regularly drank strawberry gasparillas when we went out. It sort of went like this:<BR/><BR/>Paca: "So then I wrote back to the agent, 'you wouldn't know good clean writing if a mack truck full of writing were to hit you somewhere in the vicinity of the mandibular area...."<BR/><BR/>Girlfriend: "Bartender, two more strawberry gasparillas please."<BR/><BR/>I don't see her much now. The agent or my girlfriend.pacatruehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04125048243775811714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163558930865762932006-11-14T21:48:00.000-05:002006-11-14T21:48:00.000-05:00Hey author, don't be discouraged, Pirates and Pira...Hey author, don't be discouraged, Pirates and Pirate treasure is in. It's hot. So are treasure hunts. <BR/>Fix up the query and send it out!<BR/>What ya going to lose? 39 cents?Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163554908438112872006-11-14T20:41:00.000-05:002006-11-14T20:41:00.000-05:00Ah, so Daisy, you are not up on your pirate lore. ...Ah, so Daisy, you are not up on your pirate lore. Jose Gaspar was his name, and the Spanish meaning of "Gasparilla" is "Gaspar, the outlaw". He was, and still is, a rather well known pirate, best known in the Tampa area and the southwest coast of Florida, where he was most famous for his mariniacal activities. (I think I just made up the word "mariniacal": translation - crazy bastard in a boat.) Some research indicates that prior to having his headquarters down by the keys, he had a large Federation operating off the coast of northeast Florida, near Fernandina. He left the area because it became a little too busy with other pirates, like Blackbeard and some others with cool names ;-) The premise of the treasure is that he left a cache behind near Fernandina, a rainy day stash (not that kind, Braun) he could come back to if things didn't work out down south. <BR/><BR/>So, anyway, I'm glad there's a new query on the blog LOL.<BR/><BR/>Signed,<BR/>The guy who thought Gasparilla was a cool name...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163553648875860042006-11-14T20:20:00.000-05:002006-11-14T20:20:00.000-05:00The Last Supper, by Da Vinci. If you look closely ...<I>The Last Supper, by Da Vinci. If you look closely at the painting, you'll see the tablecloth is actually a map of Florida, the item toward which Jesus is gesturing represents Key Largo, and the apostle to Jesus's left is actually the Dread Pirate Roberts.</I><BR/><BR/>I think I read that book. What was it called again?GutterBallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17943760313844692975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163546632236445912006-11-14T18:23:00.000-05:002006-11-14T18:23:00.000-05:00Gasparilla? Seriously? Isn't one of the primary be...Gasparilla? Seriously? Isn't one of the primary benefits of being a pirate captain that you get to pick yourself a cool/intimidating name? (See: Dread Pirate Roberts) I can't see any self-respecting pirate wanting to be one of "Gasparilla's men".Daisy Batemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10031425541717458261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163545748316368922006-11-14T18:09:00.000-05:002006-11-14T18:09:00.000-05:00I'm the author. I guess it's my luck to be the fir...I'm the author. I guess it's my luck to be the first query that EE critiques after his vacation and the minions are chomping at the bit. I don't mind the fun at my expense, I don't take myself so seriously that I can't laugh at me. I appreciate EE's comments, particularly about presenting it as a thriller rather than a mystery. This gave me problems because this is my first manuscript and I wrote the story as it came to me, rather than writing it to fit a particular genre description. I've learned a great deal in the last couple of years about writing, querying, and getting published, and I understand that if one wishes to have a novel published, the publisher needs to be able to fit the story it into a slot. I'm keeping that in mind as I plot my new WIP. I appreciate the comments on my query letter, some of you have been encouraging and I'm grateful for the constructive comments.<BR/><BR/>braun, as far as your comments, I didn't state in the query that the treasure was located in Neptune Beach - not that it couldn't be - only that the MC resides there. If you're from this area, you must know that pirates populated this coast from St. Augustine up to Charleston for decades in the 1700's; the premise of the story is based on factual research. As far as smoking weed in Neptune Beach, sounds like you're speaking from experience ;-)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163533777759018182006-11-14T14:49:00.000-05:002006-11-14T14:49:00.000-05:00The hoary plunder might have to be my new identity...<EM>The hoary plunder</EM> might have to be my new identity...<BR/><BR/>Pirate treasure, or indeed pirate anything, gets my vote every time, but elements of the plot seemed far-fetched. Like, why would you trust the pirate-treasure-rantings of a mysterious drifter to begin with?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163521663822375502006-11-14T11:27:00.000-05:002006-11-14T11:27:00.000-05:00"That said, it sounds like it could be a real acti..."That said, it sounds like it could be a real action-adventure mystery, and I'd like to read it. :) "<BR/><BR/>LOL, sure sounds like you're dying to read this!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163517505057286962006-11-14T10:18:00.000-05:002006-11-14T10:18:00.000-05:00You know, EE, if you had a contest where people fl...You know, EE, if you had a contest where people fleshed out these Amelia Pettipants plots, it would be an amusing new book to print: <I>Novel Deviations: The Amelia Pettipants Mysteries</I> <BR/><BR/>I also think this is the funniest thing I've read of yours, EE.<BR/><BR/>Author, the basic idea is workable, but letter makes me feel like this book isn't written yet. WHY would the tee shirt salesman and the treasure hunter continue their relationship and band together? Is it because by saving the treasure hunter he is now considered to have some vital info that the killers want? That would work. But whatever the reason, plese give the logical reasons upon which the plot elements hang. We need to know the reasons for the events, at least enough so you seem like you know what you are doing with the book.<BR/><BR/>Also, and this is just an observation of a total layman who watches National Geographic and Discovery channels too much: Treasure hunting is NOT easy, cheap, or quick. Clues involve such things as endless hours of exploration and research like first finding then reading nearly illegible manifests and ledgers. <BR/><BR/>I mention this because your letter presents the plot as too simplistic for my taste. You describe a sort of Treasure Island "found a map, have a clue, let's find treasure" simplicity of plot that I don't think will work for a 105K mystery for adults. (Unless the treasure hunter has already found something, or has inherited the clue of someone who has already died but has found the treasure. That would work.) <BR/><BR/>That said, it sounds like it could be a real action-adventure mystery, and I'd like to read it. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163511967414060972006-11-14T08:46:00.000-05:002006-11-14T08:46:00.000-05:00I'm really starting to like this Amelia Pettipants...I'm really starting to like this Amelia Pettipants chick.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163498185371574932006-11-14T04:56:00.000-05:002006-11-14T04:56:00.000-05:00Agreed with kiss-me-at-the-gate on that "hoary plu...Agreed with kiss-me-at-the-gate on that "hoary plunder" sentence. Too wordy, doesn't say enough.<BR/><BR/>But, while I think the query overall needs tightening, I love the idea of a book about a guy looking for pirate treasure. You had me at "pirate treasure".Staciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07969399927758009095noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163489267019479852006-11-14T02:27:00.000-05:002006-11-14T02:27:00.000-05:00I think I rode this ride at Disneyland!Loom of dea...I think I rode this ride at Disneyland!<BR/><BR/>Loom of death--almost as much fun as the serial scrubber.<BR/><BR/>Author, I'm having a difficult time discerning how this is different than any other treasure hunt-type story. Also, the phrases, "hoary plunder" and "watery grave" have to go.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163480943899635242006-11-14T00:09:00.000-05:002006-11-14T00:09:00.000-05:00The last time I saw the phrase "hoary plunder" was...The last time I saw the phrase "hoary plunder" was in a gay porn novel and it referred to the hero getting the love interest's {shhhh} private parts...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163480677520482232006-11-14T00:04:00.000-05:002006-11-14T00:04:00.000-05:00My goodness, gracious - vacation seems to have inv...My goodness, gracious - vacation seems to have invigorated the EE. <BR/><BR/>1) weaving the threads of fate - - didn't Richard Wagner use that in gimmick in four operas? (Norns)<BR/><BR/>2) Nostalgia alert: My Aunt who lived in NYC used to describe "silver-throated soprano Bubbles Silverman" as a large, redheaded Jewish woman wearing a floor-length mink and draggin her husband and daughter through Macy's bargain basement. I love that description of the best coloratura soprano of our time. Thanks, I needed that memroy of my Aunt and Bubbles Silverman tonight. <BR/><BR/>3) <I>Samatha Dubious has caught his attention.</I> How may I ask and shy do we care. <BR/><BR/>4) Graham Kilpatrick? Isn't that kind of a whitebread name for a villainous drug dealer? How about something less stereotypical? <BR/><BR/>5) <I>"share a destiny wove together by tragic threads from the past that bind them to their demons here and now."</I> uh, dude or dudette (whatever the case), perfect strangers share a fate from their deep dark pasts that suddenly results from demons haunting them? Do da demons of fate usually choose perfect strangers? Did they find a lamp and rub it? Did the drug dealer summon a demon. <BR/><BR/>Sorry to have so much fun at your expense.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163478567767301252006-11-13T23:29:00.000-05:002006-11-13T23:29:00.000-05:00EE, I think you've killed me... officially. My hea...EE, I think you've killed me... officially. My heart seems to have taken a nap, anyway.<BR/><BR/>This is definitely one of the best. Ever. (I've said that at least seven or eight times now...)<BR/><BR/>learns of their hunt for the hoary plunder and plans a heist that will provide him with the means for an early retirement, and leave Jack and Lou in a watery grave.<BR/><BR/>Author, that sentence made me giggle, and I don't think that is what you were going for. It was just a little over the top.<BR/><BR/>Um, hi, everyone. I've been one of those anonymice posting for a few months now and I finally decided to get my own name so I could be more than "anonymous 12:34".kiss-me-at-the-gatehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18289100980388975854noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163461500632287312006-11-13T18:45:00.000-05:002006-11-13T18:45:00.000-05:00We have a new nominee for unconventional murder we...We have a new nominee for unconventional murder weapon of the week: the common, household loom. Melonballer, your reign of terror is at an end! <BR/><BR/>Bwa,ha,ha,ha,ha!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163459310908218362006-11-13T18:08:00.000-05:002006-11-13T18:08:00.000-05:00Loom of Death! I nearly choked!Loom of Death! I nearly choked!Kate Thorntonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16449435177807306686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163456399142571472006-11-13T17:19:00.000-05:002006-11-13T17:19:00.000-05:00The Last Supper, by Da Vinci. If you look closely ...<I>The Last Supper, by Da Vinci. If you look closely at the painting, you'll see the tablecloth is actually a map of Florida, the item toward which Jesus is gesturing represents Key Largo, and the apostle to Jesus's left is actually the Dread Pirate Roberts.</I><BR/><BR/>EE, I thought that was the funniest thing you've ever written. But then I got to the loom of death. Your vacation must be doing you good!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163455226317534742006-11-13T17:00:00.000-05:002006-11-13T17:00:00.000-05:00Loom of death.EE wins!!Loom of death.<BR/><BR/>EE wins!!pacatruehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04125048243775811714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163453383370348282006-11-13T16:29:00.000-05:002006-11-13T16:29:00.000-05:00EE, you seem uncomfortably familiar with our local...EE, you seem uncomfortably familiar with our local Northeast Florida geography.<BR/><BR/>More so than the querier, at any rate, I can't imagine a less likely place to find buried pirate treasure than Neptune Beach. It <I>is</I> a great place to sell t-shirts and smoke pot*, though.<BR/><BR/>* c'mon, you can't tell me you're selling t-shirts in Neptune Beach and you're not lighting up. "Slow lane" indeed.braunhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00387344142594757730noreply@blogger.com