tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post116199071698475171..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 223Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162508719142796772006-11-02T18:05:00.000-05:002006-11-02T18:05:00.000-05:00gutterball makes a good point - maybe finding the ...gutterball makes a good point - maybe finding the killer needs to matter to your sleuth for some more compelling reason than giving her a temporary hobby. It may, of course, but I don't get a hint of that from the query. Even if she's just the town's biggest gossip and can't bear not knowing. Or is she a sociopath, being thrilled that someone is killed and driven to prove herself more intelligent than the killer? That could actually be kind of cool - sociopathic spinster as detective!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162290494628415582006-10-31T05:28:00.000-05:002006-10-31T05:28:00.000-05:00Guess the Plot #6 was a movie LOL. Except I think ...Guess the Plot #6 was a movie LOL. Except I think the beautiful women were dipped in wax to make them into mannequins. <BR/><BR/>The plot was potentially interesting, some nice humour, and could be developed into a fun read sort of like Miss Marple meets Stephanie Plum!Taliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08021644688776666185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162215850891673672006-10-30T08:44:00.000-05:002006-10-30T08:44:00.000-05:00I love the name PettyboneI love the name PettyboneVirginia Misshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07806607750887517701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162171198652695172006-10-29T20:19:00.000-05:002006-10-29T20:19:00.000-05:00I shouldn't admit to this but I've take to reading...I shouldn't admit to this but I've take to reading the GUESS THE PLOTS on facelifts and seeing which one fills me with dread and that empty feeling you get when the floor falls out from under you. It's like which one makes me wanna panic and scream - that's usually the real plot.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162162699753673582006-10-29T17:58:00.000-05:002006-10-29T17:58:00.000-05:00It's my kind of writing. A Cozy Mystery.. with a ...It's my kind of writing. A Cozy Mystery.. with a lot of heart.<BR/>TY, and Kudos oh Author, Well done query!<BR/>I like what EE said.. that there's room to expand yer query without boring yer audience.. Good Job.<BR/>You write well, and I look forward to Reading this.magzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02351879762711676150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162160243199051282006-10-29T17:17:00.000-05:002006-10-29T17:17:00.000-05:00EE- LOL at licking TR stamps. too perfect.Author,I...EE- LOL at licking TR stamps. too perfect.<BR/><BR/>Author,<BR/><BR/>I like the title--it's no frills, yet Miss Pettybone's name gives us a handle on what's to come. Feels like a cozy mystery. <BR/><BR/>I like Millicent and Emily better as first names. They just sound better with Pettybone, imho. Loraine makes me wonder when Shirley will show up (sorry).<BR/><BR/>I didn't much like the query, after thinking I would from the title and the blurb. Solving murders as a way to relieve boredom-um, boring. <BR/><BR/>Hair on fire? Been visiting Miss Snark again, huh?<BR/><BR/>You use a lot of cliches-the bored spinster with size nine, sensible, shoes, the tall dark and handsome stranger, an old childhood sweetheart (is that redundant or is he both old-aged and from her childhood?). I'm probably not interested in another cliche mystery.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Oh, and throw in some sensory detail!<BR/><BR/>Good luck.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162148889853495452006-10-29T14:08:00.000-05:002006-10-29T14:08:00.000-05:00I didn't like the "thrilled" part either. Immedia...I didn't like the "thrilled" part either. Immediately makes me dislike your protag as a shallow, cold-hearted *&#%. Am I supposed to hate her?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162145865972550312006-10-29T13:17:00.000-05:002006-10-29T13:17:00.000-05:00This has the potential to be really entertaining. ...This has the potential to be really entertaining. Is it YA? It sounds a bit like something I would have loved at 15 and that would fill me with nostalgia if I read it now. Does that make sense?<BR/><BR/>But the query leaves a little too much to the imagination. Not saying you have to tell us everything (there's not enough room in a query to do that), but it would be nice to know what all of those people have to do with anything. Are they help or suspects? Both? Neither?<BR/><BR/>And I would like to know why she thinks she can solve a mystery. Sure, everyone wants to give it a try to spice up life a bit, but all most of us have is common sense. Some of us don't even have that.<BR/><BR/>Did she take criminology courses in college? Does she watch a lot of crime TV? Surely there's some reason she would want to investigate a murder other than just because it happened. All it takes is a quick drop-in in the query to settle that niggling question.<BR/><BR/>Again, I'd still love to read this. I think it has great potential. The tone is light and full of little you-isms that probably prevail in the book. Fun stuff, I'd think.GutterBallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17943760313844692975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1162145181813550562006-10-29T13:06:00.000-05:002006-10-29T13:06:00.000-05:00You know, you might want to work in the title, the...You know, you might want to work in the title, the word count, and so forth. Agents and editors like that kind of stuff.<BR/><BR/>Also, saying she's thrilled someone got murdered doesn't sound very good. And as EE said, some real ideas about how she solves the case would help.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com