tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post9181720106304898721..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 1350Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-43615439053538143712017-04-28T14:19:20.160-04:002017-04-28T14:19:20.160-04:00Ahh, I can flesh out Z's relationships more! T...Ahh, I can flesh out Z's relationships more! This works out well. Thank you!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11462713501493638483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-42402438834494207922017-04-28T12:11:02.342-04:002017-04-28T12:11:02.342-04:00Novellas are a tough sell. If you love the story,...Novellas are a tough sell. If you love the story, why not just flesh it out? Add in a subplot or two (like a love interest or close friendship that runs into some obstacles). Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13610959493763820566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-32209730942422139942017-04-28T11:37:40.183-04:002017-04-28T11:37:40.183-04:00I was too excited to restart the query so I ended ...I was too excited to restart the query so I ended up rewriting it yesterday. Hopefully it's better now that I have a better idea of what a query is. Thanks!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11462713501493638483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-81277098223050167312017-04-28T11:36:21.318-04:002017-04-28T11:36:21.318-04:00Funnily, I make a reference to it when she eats &#...Funnily, I make a reference to it when she eats 'apple'. It has some times to Words, although they're loose.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11462713501493638483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-41493278105188050922017-04-28T11:09:25.001-04:002017-04-28T11:09:25.001-04:00Would it work as a novella?Would it work as a novella?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11462713501493638483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-85463261596281471492017-04-28T09:32:23.910-04:002017-04-28T09:32:23.910-04:00Great concept, great character name (Ziva!), but i...Great concept, great character name (Ziva!), but it does raise a lot of unanswered questions: Who curses Ziva and why, and what is her character goal. And above all, what does it mean to be cursed to eat written words? Like, she literally eats paper? Or her computer monitor? (That would hurt). <br /><br />This kind of reminds me of the biblical story of Eve. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-38502468008454721322017-04-28T03:22:49.806-04:002017-04-28T03:22:49.806-04:0050K is maybe a bit skimpy for a YA novel these day...50K is maybe a bit skimpy for a YA novel these days, so you need to show more of the plot to make it clear there IS a plot.<br />Try going back to the archives on this site and look for finished versions of queries.<br /><br />Unfortunately, this reads more like a kids' beginning chapter book than anything remotely like YA. The only hint there might be something mature in the story is when you say something about humanity's memories, but you need to explain what that means.<br /><br />St0n3hengehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08504412781917592790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-34897561632635888052017-04-27T13:55:44.782-04:002017-04-27T13:55:44.782-04:00Ah, this helps a ton! Thank you so much for the ad...Ah, this helps a ton! Thank you so much for the advice. I thought queries were like extended blurbs, but it seems like they're more detailed. Definitely going to come back!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11462713501493638483noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-82282555952336181712017-04-27T13:44:07.174-04:002017-04-27T13:44:07.174-04:00You don't really need to state all possible ge...You don't really need to state all possible genre elements contained in your book. <br /><br />Maybe try one sentence to explain the curse (you can include the cause if it's short)--...cursed by a witch she called a , she must now eat her words, as in everything she writes on paper. Or whatever actually is happening.<br /><br />A few sentences to explain why this is a problem--she's eating her written tests, she can no longer pass notes in class leading to her BFF thinking...<br /><br />If her eating knowledge through her written words is removing that knowledge from the rest of the world, you need to explicitly say so, and what she plans on doing about it.<br /><br />Explain her goal or the story goal--???? <-no idea what this is.<br /><br />Warning--"learns a lesson" is probably death to your query. The MC can learn a lesson, but that shouldn't be their goal or the story goal as it usually means the story is preachy, which doesn't sell.<br /><br />Good LuckAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-35837783148802012972017-04-27T12:56:53.331-04:002017-04-27T12:56:53.331-04:00What EE said - start over. Write the query as tho...What EE said - start over. Write the query as though you're explaining the story to someone who knows nothing about it. Good luck. Query writing is, in a lot of ways, just as difficult as writing an actual novel.InevitablePlotTwistnoreply@blogger.com