tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post8436479269662717189..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: New Beginning 901Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-56932864271104554062011-11-14T19:36:30.748-05:002011-11-14T19:36:30.748-05:00Author here. Thanks for your comments. It's ...Author here. Thanks for your comments. It's sort of an anti-Nano project. Am using November to put the perpetual novel project aside and write some unrelated short stories. <br /><br />Must reword the kidnapped phrase. She snatched the uncooperative Mr. Whiskers. He had a similar disregard for ribbons in the story which then quickly fizzled. <br /><br />Am now thinking he must inspire further misbehavior by wrongly indicating she does have the love.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-51255425900867707912011-11-14T19:09:03.108-05:002011-11-14T19:09:03.108-05:00Aside from minor clarity issues, this is pretty go...Aside from minor clarity issues, this is pretty good stuff. Good voice.<br /><br />Good luck with it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-3771295176141732472011-11-14T16:15:54.589-05:002011-11-14T16:15:54.589-05:00I'm guessing this is a romance? It's a cut...I'm guessing this is a romance? It's a cute and fun opening.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18217202416002233005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-85977440776480862382011-11-14T15:51:59.927-05:002011-11-14T15:51:59.927-05:00I'm with EE: I'm not sure whether the cook...I'm with EE: I'm not sure whether the cook, the cat, or both, were kidnapped.<br /><br />Fun opening, though. More?nonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00415222406280230021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-2172576841372611522011-11-14T14:16:59.700-05:002011-11-14T14:16:59.700-05:00A NaNoWriMo Opening
Good start. I'd go with &...A NaNoWriMo Opening<br /><br />Good start. I'd go with "Justine" rather than "The Maid" at the start of P3. I wasn't sure who the maid was. We should gather that Justine isn't nobility from the fact she had to steal the salmon and the ribbons, so you can hold off revealing she's a maid for a bit.<br /><br />Also, I wasn't sure if it was the cook or the cat who was kidnapped. Can cats be kidnapped? Do we need the word "kidnapped" in sentence 1?Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.com