tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post8294738756951903245..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Synopsis 54Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-72481610177291976072016-09-22T17:22:41.906-04:002016-09-22T17:22:41.906-04:00I'm going to name an ancient, abandoned fantas...I'm going to name an ancient, abandoned fantasy city "Why'nt'cha."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-59240708493820413142016-09-21T19:55:22.030-04:002016-09-21T19:55:22.030-04:00LOL, EE.
"None of this addresses the basic i...LOL, EE.<br /><br />"None of this addresses the basic issue here: the writer of the query still needs to work on his or her writing. If the query and the synopsis were written in dialect, but were perfectly coherent, most likely none of us would complain; we read lots of things like that."<br />We do write differently than we speak. Otherwise you'd be reading a lot of dialogue like this:<br />"Where's the thing?"<br />"What thing?"<br />"The thing. The- You know, the clicker."<br />"You had it last."<br />"Maybe it's...Oh, here it is. Nevermind, I found it."<br />"What?"<br />"I FOUND IT. It was under the cushion."<br />"Why'nt'cha look there first?"<br /><br />And so forth.<br /><br /> <br />St0n3hengehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08504412781917592790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-6007329157496271672016-09-20T22:14:51.736-04:002016-09-20T22:14:51.736-04:00Opinions expressed in the comment trail are not ne...Opinions expressed in the comment trail are not necessarily those of the blog administrator.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-63828169642199296212016-09-20T21:32:32.677-04:002016-09-20T21:32:32.677-04:00There's nothing wrong with "ain't&quo...There's nothing wrong with "ain't" or "y'all" as long as you live in a place where everyone talks that way and you never plan on moving anywhere else or getting a job that requires you to speak on the telephone. Otherwise, there most certainly is something wrong with it. You will be branded a hick and ignorant at least, an idiot at worst. <br /><br />St0n3hengehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08504412781917592790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-51069051333280418402016-09-20T19:36:02.677-04:002016-09-20T19:36:02.677-04:00There's a difference between prescriptive and ...There's a difference between prescriptive and descriptive grammar. Most modern Americans speak at least two dialects of English, one formal and one informal.<br /><br />None of this addresses the basic issue here: the writer of the query still needs to work on his or her writing. If the query and the synopsis were written in dialect, but were perfectly coherent, most likely none of us would complain; we read lots of things like that.<br /><br />It's quite possible the writer is not a native speaker of English; if so, he or she would really be much better off writing in his or her native language.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-30112940267385405432016-09-20T13:44:35.548-04:002016-09-20T13:44:35.548-04:00Nothing wrong with "ain't" and "...Nothing wrong with "ain't" and "y'all" in and of themselves.<br /><br />I think parents/family are most responsible for teaching a kid decent grammar, by using it themselves. If that's not happening, there's probably little even the most dedicated teacher can do (except with kids who are highly studious and interested in learning).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-72559237141930281832016-09-19T20:44:28.753-04:002016-09-19T20:44:28.753-04:00My phone autocorrects perfectly spelled words into...My phone autocorrects perfectly spelled words into emoji. It's a 📱 conspiracy.Noel (tell me now)https://www.blogger.com/profile/12044704621194378487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-34230324870241599452016-09-19T15:47:57.627-04:002016-09-19T15:47:57.627-04:00I don't see how he's blaming teachers. Tea...I don't see how he's blaming teachers. Teachers teach the curriculum. And it seems obvious that the "I have a headache" thing was a joke. <br /><br />I was taught in the 80's experimental dumbed-down phase of public school. The parts of speech were mentioned, but I don't remember much grammar teaching. However, I had two native English speaking parents who didn't "talk down" to me. I was encouraged to watch educational television and taught to read before I got into school. As a result I'm probably above average when it comes to understanding grammar. Most of my school friends weren't so lucky, especially since many of them had parents that used words wrong frequently ("prostrate" for "prostate," for instance), and said "ain't" and "y'all" a lot. <br /><br />So I think being fortunate enough to have parents that speak English properly is helpful, and some educational tv can be helpful as well. I do think, though, that public school needs to shoulder its share.St0n3hengehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08504412781917592790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-81106660165104282572016-09-19T10:49:49.103-04:002016-09-19T10:49:49.103-04:00Mister Furkles, I have to object. From my own expe...Mister Furkles, I have to object. From my own experience as both teacher and parent, the "sit down and shut up" is an ineffective behavior management technique. Having taught many classes of thirty ten-year-olds, I can tell you absolutely that no adult using that as a technique will last in a primary classroom more than one week. I have heard substitutes control children like that, but they don't usually return. Grammar is learned not only be reading, but by listening to people. In the olden days, television was a good stand-in for parents who didn't speak fluent English. Not so anymore. Stop blaming teachers! *argh*Jeannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15537401376228018016noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-30758236301752505622016-09-19T01:48:31.823-04:002016-09-19T01:48:31.823-04:00My guess is that the author is a child (in which c...My guess is that the author is a child (in which case keep going and good luck) or from another country where English is not the first language (in which case keep going and good luck).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-39674863214047982652016-09-19T00:55:11.648-04:002016-09-19T00:55:11.648-04:00Yeah, I have to agree with everyone here. There ar...Yeah, I have to agree with everyone here. There are some real train wrecks in this synopsis. If you can't tell what's wrong with "Dustin barely surviving with lethal cuts, and then ambushed by Unawakened, she exerted herself beyond the limits to save themselves," or "Kept and experimented she tried to escape and succeeded, but caught when she searched for Dustin," then you're just not "there" yet. St0n3hengehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08504412781917592790noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1512217606916946212016-09-18T20:29:29.482-04:002016-09-18T20:29:29.482-04:00As for the *query*
As for the synopsis
Apologies...As for the *query*<br /><br />As for the <b>synopsis</b><br /><br />ApologiesAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-7570990185921089412016-09-17T12:50:52.408-04:002016-09-17T12:50:52.408-04:00I agree with the other comments that you need to l...I agree with the other comments that you need to learn more about writing and using words correctly.<br /><br />That being said, I do advise writing more stories if that's your passion. Practice the grammar principles you learn. Keep in mind your stories won't be publishable at first, but that you will get better. Also, if it's a story that truly matters to you, you can go back and revise once you can see what needs to be fixed.<br /><br />Read a lot of professionally published material (it usually has better quality control). Pay attention to the use of language in what you read.<br /><br />As for the query, things that might help:<br /><br />How old are Lauren and her brother?<br />What are the Unawakened?<br />What do you mean by elemental powers?<br />Why are there evacuation centers and how are they run?<br /><br />Be specific. Example: When you say "she exerts herself" what does she do to exert herself? Throw rocks? Run away? <br /><br />Middle to end of the story sounds like Lauren keeps being saved by other people. Most agents/editors prefer for the main character of your story to be the one who saves themselves and those around them.<br /><br />Good LuckAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-86405089040227779802016-09-17T09:08:58.511-04:002016-09-17T09:08:58.511-04:00no point to working on a query and synopsis until ...<i>no point to working on a query and synopsis until you improve your writing skills</i><br /><br />That's the bad new. The good news is that English Grammar is craft and you can master it. It's not easy. Grammar school used to teach grammar but these days they call it primary school and maybe that's because they quit teaching grammar and now teach primary, whatever that is.<br /><br />(I think primary is: "Class, sit down and shut up! I have headache.") <br /><br />Websites that teach something about English grammar:<br /><br />http://public . wsu . edu/~brians/errors/errors.html <br /><br />http://grammartips . homestead . com/<br /><br />http://conjugator . reverso . net/conjugation-english.html<br /><br />http://www . dailywritingtips . com/<br /><br />http://extension . missouri . edu/p/CM201<br /><br />(remove the spaces around the dots)<br /><br />There are others but these are some my favorites.<br /> Mister Furkleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07156977719916770984noreply@blogger.com