tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post766882127705042454..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 1179Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-72376455135805773402014-01-11T15:02:06.234-05:002014-01-11T15:02:06.234-05:00Why is an Connor turning grade schoolers into were...Why is an Connor turning grade schoolers into werewolves? I'm assuming it takes some sort of biting. Unless Melissa has recessive werewolf genes or something, I'd wonder why Connor's hanging around jailbait and not looking for either bodybuilders or hot sorority girls.<br /><br />Charlie joining them despite not being a werewolf is an intriguing concept, though._*rachel*_https://www.blogger.com/profile/03293167107180931700noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-51143808170643548742014-01-09T20:02:56.255-05:002014-01-09T20:02:56.255-05:00I'm sure he's very nice. But he didn't...I'm sure he's very nice. But he didn't invent werewolves. Werewolves are in the public domain, like amnesia and Texas. AlaskaRavenclawnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-11827437589420432092014-01-09T15:58:39.822-05:002014-01-09T15:58:39.822-05:00Author here!
Thank you so much for all the feedb...Author here! <br /><br />Thank you so much for all the feedback. I can definitely see how my query is a little vague and the details I can emphasize to make it more exciting. I guess the main point is that Charlie isn't supernatural but her intelligence and, essentially, stubbornness, make her an asset anyway? She has self-esteem issues, which I'm trying to handle without making her too whiny. <br /><br />There is an Irish legend about werewolves who are protectors rather than vicious, man-eating animals. It seemed like an interesting change from the usual "fight against their evil nature" type, especially since the main character isn't one of them. <br /><br />Also, I laughed out loud at the Guess the Plot summary based on my query. <br /><br />It might be a while before I get around to revising this--I've suddenly become swamped with other things. But when I do, I will definitely keep all of these comments in mind!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-24671077118063205242014-01-09T15:12:32.143-05:002014-01-09T15:12:32.143-05:00IMHO, nobody writes like Mr.Duncan (I have a ridic...IMHO, nobody writes like Mr.Duncan (I have a ridiculous crush on him) and I love his monsters. Their sole purpose is, to quote him, fuckkilleat. This is what I like to read. *shrugs* Sorry if it seems narrow-minded. I'm just one little reader in an ocean of millions.<br /><br />CavalierdeNuithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09862976676163347369noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-43439315829583135462014-01-09T01:19:08.648-05:002014-01-09T01:19:08.648-05:00LOL, I've never read a single werewolf story t...LOL, I've never read a single werewolf story that said that werewolves have to "eat people once a month" or they die. <br /><br />And yeah, one of the great things about werewolves, vampires, etc. is that the author gets to reinvent them with each new story. Stop criticizing a story based on your own ill-informed hang-ups about what a werewolf can or can't be, CN.SBnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-300185655592668722014-01-09T00:05:30.500-05:002014-01-09T00:05:30.500-05:00If you're addressing me EE, it's hard for ...If you're addressing me EE, it's hard for me to believe they aren't real because Mr. Duncan has convinced me they are. Does anyone know where to find silver bullets?CavalierdeNuithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09862976676163347369noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-62969406794312080402014-01-08T23:05:19.818-05:002014-01-08T23:05:19.818-05:00DeNuit, every writer has the right to his or her o...DeNuit, every writer has the right to his or her own werewolves. <br /><br />Plenty of books feature werewolves who don't eat humans. Terry Pratchett's Sergeant Angua and JK Rowling's Remus Lupin would recoil at the very thought of chowing down on the locals. <br /><br />I think you need to get out and meet more werewolves.AlaskaRavenclawnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-26219418020829254822014-01-08T21:51:50.133-05:002014-01-08T21:51:50.133-05:00Uh, excuse me, but you do know that werewolves are...Uh, excuse me, but you do know that werewolves aren't real, right?Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-70402751229894968132014-01-08T21:23:02.299-05:002014-01-08T21:23:02.299-05:00What is preying on the citizens of Elks Glade? A f...What is preying on the citizens of Elks Glade? A fog? Druids? Witches? Mold? If there are werewolves that aren't eating people, then what is eating people? Werewolves eat people once a month and they can't survive without doing this. Are werewolves and this something both preying on people? <br /><br />Why would werewolves care about saving their food from a supernatural entity unless that supernatural entity was a threat to the food supply? <br /><br />I'm having a difficult time believing that a pack of werewolves cares about humans and their feelings. Humans are food.<br /><br />I'm asking all these questions because I'm a huge fan of Glen Duncan's Bloodlines Trilogy--an adult werewolf series. I'm really into adult werewolves right now. Mr. Duncan does a good job of helping his readers understand that werewolves eat people, and nothing will ever stop werewolves from doing this, except love, but that's rare.CavalierdeNuithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09862976676163347369noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-48354636595063715512014-01-08T14:46:13.433-05:002014-01-08T14:46:13.433-05:00If there is a twist, if there's something diff...If there is a twist, if there's something different here, it needs to be absolutely front-and-center.<br /><br />My agent says that it's impossible to get an editor to read paranormal YA right now. That probably means it's hard to get an agent to take it on. So you'll need to make sure yours sounds fresh and different.<br />AlaskaRavenclawnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-48649998015150162752014-01-08T12:57:45.923-05:002014-01-08T12:57:45.923-05:00I vote for EE Opening #2.
I also like the spin on...I vote for EE Opening #2. <br />I also like the spin on werewolves not being able to trust humans and that Charlie elbows her way into the pack in spite of Connor’s objections. <br />I like the way the story will be told by a character who feels all the cool stuff is happening to her friends – lots of opportunity for teen angst. <br />I hope you take EE’s advice on “even ordinary people can be good at something.” Whether it’s her research ability/librarian skills or the fact that she has opposable thumbs 24-7, for one reason or other the werewolves are going to need her help. That is what will make this a compelling read. <br />And it would be great if the real threat to humans (whatever that is) is counting on the fact that the werewolves would never enlist human help.PLaFnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-37616996386215815662014-01-08T05:56:52.760-05:002014-01-08T05:56:52.760-05:00I like the idea of a bunch of vigilante werewolves...I like the idea of a bunch of vigilante werewolves who use their skills for good instead of evil. Actually, they sound more interesting than Charlie, they get to grow hair and fangs and use their strength to fight bad guys once a month. <br /><br />So let's see, Connor has turned three ordinary people into werewolves...did they consent to this? Are they a little peeved at him doing this to them? And can they keep themselves from snacking on the locals? How can they tell the difference between friend and foe in their lupine state? And the big question...who the heck are they fighting anyway? <br /><br />You dont need to answer all the questions in the query, but when reading the query brings up these issues, maybe it's time to tweak. Maybe focus on the antagnoists here. Good luck. <br />- Jo AntareauAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-21502446131370249472014-01-08T00:46:18.115-05:002014-01-08T00:46:18.115-05:00This sounds like an interesting premise, but the q...This sounds like an interesting premise, but the query is a little confusing about who the bad guys are. While reading it, I thought the bad guys were also werewolves. I'd say clarify more who are the heroes and who are the villains. And I really like EE's 3rd suggestion for opening line. <br /><br />And I want to see more about what qualities make the ordinary human special. Because if she weren't special in some way, she'd have nothing more to add to the quest than the werewolves do. If she's cleverer than all of them, show us that. Or whatever it is.<br /><br />This reminds me of "Team Human", a book about the best friend of a girl who falls for a vampire. It was cute, but one of the problems with that book, I thought, was that the main character spent most of the book dealing with her friend's problems rather than problems that more directly affected her. I hope this book wouldn't have a similar issue.SBnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-31505526584112635192014-01-07T22:47:39.068-05:002014-01-07T22:47:39.068-05:00Hi author,
So, in reading the query, it looks as i...Hi author,<br />So, in reading the query, it looks as if the MC is the intellect, here. She solves the mystery of her friend's werewolfishness. Now she's out to solve the mystery of who's killing the villagers. Throw in two spunky buddies and a platonic boyfriend and you got yourself a bona fide Nancy Drew. <br /><br />What's important about the werewolves? Why are they key to the story? It seems Charlie is going to wrap up all the loose ends on this Caper, so why the fangs?<br /><br />In total, the long-winded sentences and vague description leaves me with a blah feeling. I get no urgency, and can't fathom how the werewolves fit.<br /><br />Also, let's not put Charlie in the dented can cart in the first sentence. She's gotta have some unique qualities. Even if she isn't a super.<br /><br />Best of luck.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18159799725109784001noreply@blogger.com