tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post6805489707276686835..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 797Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-72215361887121660352010-07-19T18:47:22.229-04:002010-07-19T18:47:22.229-04:00EE asked:
So suddenly Saint Joan inhabits her bo...EE asked: <br /><br />So suddenly Saint Joan inhabits her body but Jeanne D. is still in control? Do they both have control? Do they communicate?<br /><br />I don't get it either. Is this like <i>All of Me</i>, with two separate beings duking it out inside one body? Is it like the Jeff Goldblum remake of <i>The Fly</i>, with one being taking over the other? I would need to know before I'd say yes to someone telling me that Joan of Arc is also an atheist who ignores her problems.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-4627556729199900082010-07-17T13:49:22.593-04:002010-07-17T13:49:22.593-04:00Hey Angie, ("chute" not "shoot"...Hey Angie, ("chute" not "shoot" but being from cowboy country I couldn't resist the tease. Get me back on my opening, coming soon), agree with all you said.<br />Writer, Evil doesn't mind this? High praise. Hope you do what his Badness says. What Evil lurks in hearts of writrs? Who knows, but I'd take the suggestions. I'd read on. Nice job.<br />BibiAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-44115303730334285992010-07-16T23:15:38.826-04:002010-07-16T23:15:38.826-04:00I'm stuck on that first sentence. It's suc...I'm stuck on that first sentence. It's such a good hook, an atheist saint, that I kept thinking about it, but then I just kept thinking about it. I thought at first that she was an atheist throughout the novel, but as the evidence of divinity was more and more obvious as each sentence arrived, I decided she was an idiot. The reason atheists exist, well the good one, is because they find the evidence for divinity lacking. If God's giving you supernatural birthday presents and you keep being attacked by Beezelbub, then being an atheist is absurd. Then I realized she must have started off as an atheist and learned she was wrong, which is cool, but that starts to become a complicated first sentence.<br /><br />But maybe it bugged no one else.<br /><br />I think your voice, concept, and basic plot are clear. It's just up to the agent if they want that. So good job.pacatruehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04125048243775811714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-79396054239353079382010-07-16T17:32:20.378-04:002010-07-16T17:32:20.378-04:00Hooked!!!!!!!!!
I read the #2 GTP and was going t...Hooked!!!!!!!!!<br /><br />I read the #2 GTP and was going to be so disappointed if that either wasn't the story or the query sucked. I'm not disappointed!<br /><br />This is a great high concept story with a nice voice. If I read this type of pitch on a book jacket, I'd read the opening lines/page and if it was decent, I'd buy the book. And I'm a total reading snob.Stephen Prosapiohttp://www.prosapio.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-21231314528322444952010-07-16T15:43:04.260-04:002010-07-16T15:43:04.260-04:00This does sound like an interesting one. :) I hav...This does sound like an interesting one. :) I have to agree with E.E.'s comment about the sword, though. Has Jeane always been Joan of Arc and just found out, or is she newly possessed with Joan's spirit?Chicorynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-88113954496800541002010-07-16T13:16:38.996-04:002010-07-16T13:16:38.996-04:00I think I agree: you could leave it as is, or EE&#...I think I agree: you could leave it as is, or EE's suggestions would also work well. But that being said, this is one of few queries I've really enjoyed the way it came out of the shoot. This novel sounds very intersesting and creative... something I would like to read.angela robbinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07114119913653244467noreply@blogger.com