tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post6622189820501353300..comments2024-03-18T13:32:44.865-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: New Beginning 986Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-89453496114325116402013-01-06T15:29:32.556-05:002013-01-06T15:29:32.556-05:00I started the process of submitting the story.
Th...I started the process of submitting the story. <br />That feels like abandoning a child in the lobby of Grand Central Station in NYC. <br />Or Pahrump Texas. <br /><br />One of those two. Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18217202416002233005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-123461192728561842013-01-05T17:46:01.398-05:002013-01-05T17:46:01.398-05:00I always prefer to think about it as rehousing you...I always prefer to think about it as rehousing your darlings rather than killing them. I'm sure you'll find a new home for those paragraphs. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-71994392408057331422013-01-05T04:10:36.424-05:002013-01-05T04:10:36.424-05:00Easy to work those in a touch later than earlier.....Easy to work those in a touch later than earlier.. <br /><br />There's an ease you are developing in your work. It might be the concise engineer in you that keeps you wedded to the short stories. No worries, all in good time if decide to tackle longer pieces. Or not. That may not be your style, who knows. Seen a lot of depth of late. Being the worm could fit beautifully after the intro. Anyone who has animals knows where you are coming from in the story. <br /><br />I'd love to read on.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-24050601494775847252013-01-04T21:27:40.998-05:002013-01-04T21:27:40.998-05:00I have every intent of reusing those first two par...I have every intent of reusing those first two paragraphs. <br /><br />The idea of a character in a bar comparing himself to the worm in a bottle of tequila is too good to throw away. The lament of "would that I were made of stone" is also too good to discard. <br /><br />They'll get used this year, somehow.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18217202416002233005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-39210292069957753662013-01-04T19:51:14.939-05:002013-01-04T19:51:14.939-05:00Sorry the first two paragraphs are gone, even if I...Sorry the first two paragraphs are gone, even if I understand why. And it's right to lose them, considering we live in a world where the attention span of readers is limited to the length of a text message.<br /><br />Anyway, much as I liked the first two paragraphs, I have to admit the last two are kick-ass all by themselves. Could be the flap inside the book.<br /><br />Good job, Dave. Keep it going.<br /><br />By the way, I knew it was you when I first saw it in continuations. That's why I liked the first two paragraphs. Voice. I knew where it was coming from.jameshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17956891424819530906noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-87900591162049784472013-01-04T17:31:30.877-05:002013-01-04T17:31:30.877-05:00The first two paragraphs are gone.
I started the...The first two paragraphs are gone. <br /><br />I started the story based on that first line and the story changed enough to leave it behind. <br /><br />I'm revising the rest of the story because boxing and blood are the images left. Stone isn't. Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18217202416002233005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-36993672957808719822013-01-04T14:54:00.514-05:002013-01-04T14:54:00.514-05:00I agree, the first two grafs are fun to read, but ...I agree, the first two grafs are fun to read, but the story really starts on graf three. I like this story so far! Would read on for sure. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-86295265728466163112013-01-04T11:33:56.201-05:002013-01-04T11:33:56.201-05:00As much as I love that opening paragraph, I think ...As much as I love that opening paragraph, I think you're right.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18217202416002233005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-49194447451732995572013-01-04T11:29:17.550-05:002013-01-04T11:29:17.550-05:00Hi Dave,
Lab animals infected with hazardous/infec...Hi Dave,<br />Lab animals infected with hazardous/infectious diseases are cremated. Sanitary burial for non hazardous carcasses may be allowed but it is expensive. Usually a rendering firm will is hired to remove the carcasses. <br /><br /> <br /><br /> <br /><br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-77255252275615936992013-01-04T11:08:25.306-05:002013-01-04T11:08:25.306-05:00I would drop the first two paragraphs.
The ten we...I would drop the first two paragraphs.<br /><br />The ten weeks, ten failures line suggests that they start a new experiment each week. Which isn't the case, as this last chimp lasted more than two weeks. So they keep infecting a new chimp with the same virus after the previous chimp dies to see how long they can keep this new one alive? If the goal is to prevent death, have they considered not infecting the chimps?<br />Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.com