tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post5085605262393308711..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 822Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-78947442342197166542010-09-17T12:29:56.257-04:002010-09-17T12:29:56.257-04:00"When I was young, I met a troubled fellow wh..."When I was young, I met a troubled fellow who was quite a bit (o)f a wild man. He could be rude, crude and angry. He wasn't a bad person just uncontrolled."<br /><br />Sounds like EE, Dave.<br /><br /><br />I agree. What are the details of the conflict(s) and how does this affect/change our MC, and what is she going to do about the conflict, how is she going to handle it?angela robbinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07114119913653244467noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-78902897816433783852010-09-17T02:32:35.683-04:002010-09-17T02:32:35.683-04:00The problem with this query is that you've com...The problem with this query is that you've communicated everything in broad generalizations with no details, no specifics, and no rationale.<br /><br />If your query were a physical object, it'd be a cue-ball: round, smooth, one color, no details or interest on its surface. And the queries that catch an agent's interest are more like a sculpture with all sorts of interesting and intriguing details to look at from multiple angles and the like.<br /><br />@Dave: <br /><i>After having him as friend for a few years, he phones me and tells me that a woman he'd <b>seen</b> for a few years told him (and proved to him) that she was his birth mother</i><br />- Well, I certainly hope he stopped <i>dating</i> his mother after she told him that :P You did mention he gets married later...<br /><br />As for GTP#1, there were some famous Japanese siamese-twins around turn of the 20th century, joined at the hip, who came to America and made money off their celebrity. <br /><br />Amazingly, they both got married and fathered 22 children between them (they could walk, and both had functioning genitalia--don't ask me how they worked out actually consummating a relationship >_> )<br /><br />Also, later in life one of them became an alcoholic, but the other remained sober :P <br /><br />Also, at one point one was arrested for striking a man, and the judge was going to sentence them to jail, but released them because he said it would've been false imprisonment for the other twin :P<br /><br />And, on the boat to America the crew had to break up a fight between the twins! lol<br /><br />But the poignant moment--one day one of the twins woke up and noticed his twin had died and gone cold in the night ;;;>_><br /><br />Someone sent for a doctor to try to separate the still living twin, but he just curled up around his brother and died himself, unable to bear being alone apparently.M. G. E.https://www.blogger.com/profile/08995766358224581297noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-81601762804165627592010-09-17T01:35:50.692-04:002010-09-17T01:35:50.692-04:00Hi Author: I got tripped up on the father disappea...Hi Author: I got tripped up on the father disappearing and Nikki leaving the country soon after. I don't know what Miss Manners would say is a minimum grieving time for a disappeared parent even just for decorum sake, but I don't think it would be "soon."<br /><br />After that, what EE says.<br /><br /><i>What's the mystery? Who gets murdered?</i><br />*Snicker.*Phoenix Sullivanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03290349031002504007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-19907017863477283802010-09-16T22:36:06.400-04:002010-09-16T22:36:06.400-04:00I was also intrigued by GPT #1! Great idea!I was also intrigued by GPT #1! Great idea!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-69475891562592600832010-09-16T21:34:10.273-04:002010-09-16T21:34:10.273-04:00I like the idea of GTP #1. Into the idea vault it ...I like the idea of GTP #1. Into the idea vault it goes!Rebecca Christiansenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03635706076314669496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-79682730533575386602010-09-16T16:46:40.057-04:002010-09-16T16:46:40.057-04:00When I was young, I met a troubled fellow who was ...When I was young, I met a troubled fellow who was quite a bit if a wild man. He could be rude, crude and angry. He wasn't a bad person just uncontrolled. He told me that as a teen, his family died in a rather nasty moving vehicle accident (Father, Mother, brother, sister) while going to church. He was the only one left and a grandfather raised him. I didn't whore or drink so I was a good influence on him. <br /><br />After having him as friend for a few years, he phones me and tells me that a woman he'd seen for a few years told him (and proved to him) that she was his birth mother and the stepmother (who died in the accident) wasn't his mom. <br /><br />He changed as night and day and I was happy for him. I heard a few years later that he was married and had a good job and was running the family farm. The replacement family settled his life. <br /><br />That's the emotional part of finding missing or lost or unknown relatives. It's the contrast between before and after. EE says almost the same things as I'm relating here as my experience. She's obviously bringing something back from America (a character trait, knowledge of some sort) that will defeat the bad guys. <br /><br />That's where your query will get interesting. How does she handle these new relatives and end up with a gracious and loving family? This plot has great drama built into it, let the query reflect that.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-55588822981492514572010-09-16T16:25:13.782-04:002010-09-16T16:25:13.782-04:00Be specific and tell us more of the plot.
The fam...Be specific and tell us more of the plot.<br /><br />The family's got mysterious secret. So do half the families in fiction. What makes yours different?_*rachel*_https://www.blogger.com/profile/03293167107180931700noreply@blogger.com