tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post4246197786069428383..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Synopsis 56Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-9438224298068423192016-11-06T16:29:52.516-05:002016-11-06T16:29:52.516-05:00Example of repetitive information:
"A couple...Example of repetitive information:<br /><br />"A couple of months later, the family finds the Watsons’ <b>evil spirits are trying to force them out of their home</b>."<br /><br />"The spirits still think the house belongs to them and <b>they want to retake ownership of the house</b>."<br /><br />You've said essentially the same thing twice in different ways with slightly different details. Pick one. Rearrange the details so you don't need to repeat (for clarity, for more specifics, for whatever -- you are limited on space. Repetition takes up space. Taking out the repetition will give you more space to say what the spirits try besides possessing the daughter, etc.)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-62093161610586046652016-11-05T20:06:38.872-04:002016-11-05T20:06:38.872-04:00Hi, I'm the writer of the query and synopsis. ...Hi, I'm the writer of the query and synopsis. Speaking of specific details, there is only so much that you can put in a query and synopsis. So I did the best that I could do. It is definitely different from the rest of the books. I know others compared this book to movies instead of books--but hopefully, I'll try to focus on the elements that make it different. <br /><br />Actually, I don't think I've repeated that much of anything in the synopsis. (Maybe a couple of times) If anything I must have been trying to make my point clear and if I made a mistake I'll just fix it. The book has been edited and most likely will continue to be. Also, the book doesn't have any repetitive writing. I made sure of it. <br /><br />Also, Paula is inspired by a lot of people in pop culture that choose to stay in haunted houses, thinking they can get rid of the spirits. She is a very smart woman. Her husband is too. <br /><br />Thank you, Evil Editor, for your critique!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-39544509485610768832016-11-03T12:15:06.886-04:002016-11-03T12:15:06.886-04:00Give specific details about who tries what exactly...Give specific details about who tries what exactly. You need your book to stand out as being a new take on a common theme. If it's not a particularly new take, you need to demonstrate what it has that will make people want to buy it.<br /><br />There are several places in the synopsis where you repeat the same information. This makes me wonder if the book has the same kind of repetitive writing, which would mean it needs heavy editing, which would mean a rejection letter.<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com