tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post366915874989665767..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 619Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-62286451292791159432009-04-08T00:38:00.000-04:002009-04-08T00:38:00.000-04:00Is Stacey a minor? If so, how does she conceal her...Is Stacey a minor? If so, how does she conceal her arrest (and probation?) from her mother?batgirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15143310557906978680noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-7988894959636391222009-04-06T22:14:00.000-04:002009-04-06T22:14:00.000-04:00Point one: If it's animated, it's called anime. If...Point one: If it's animated, it's called anime. If it's in comic book form, it's called manga.<BR/><BR/>Point two: If the anime/manga story is just a reflection or mirror of what's going on in reality, then this is a dangerous story to tell in that I think a lot of people will be put off by it (unless it's done <I>extremely</I> well).<BR/><BR/>People who want to read about Stacey and her problems will be jarred by the interspersing of fantasy and demons (esp. of a Japanese flavor).<BR/><BR/>Fans of anime will be jarred by the fact that <I>nothing weird happens</I>. They'll be expecting (as a lot of us were) that Takara will suddenly jump out of the pages, or Stacey will be sucked into Takara's world, or <I>something</I>.<BR/><BR/>This goes for <I>The Never-Ending Story</I> too. The story wasn't just a reflection of real-world events, but the boy became part of the story. The world's collided in a very real way.<BR/><BR/>If worlds collide in your story, make that clear in the query. If they don't... well, all I can say is it doesn't sound like something I'd want to read.Adam Heinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02225813532455467868noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-64390000875431900742009-04-06T18:26:00.000-04:002009-04-06T18:26:00.000-04:00It SEEMS that this is supposed to be something lik...It SEEMS that this is supposed to be something like <B>THE NEVERENDING STORY,</B> in which the character escapes from life into a fictional world; but it's not working for me--or, apparently, for anyone else.<BR/><BR/>About telling stories backwards: It works brilliantly in <B>THE SCOLD'S BRIDLE</B> by Minette Walters. It opens with an old woman being found dead. From then on, chapters about events proceeding forward in a normal manner are alternated with excerpts, starting from right before her death, from the victim's diary. The last page of the book is the first entry in her diary--and it explains everything.talpiannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13978075304795724185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-2646030020419176182009-04-06T17:15:00.000-04:002009-04-06T17:15:00.000-04:00When you said she escapes in the series, I thought...When you said she escapes in the series, I thought you meant something along the lines of vegging out in front of the TV screen. You're saying she morphs into the episode? If that's the case, then you've got to tell me how that happened. There were a few other things going on that we're exactly clear, but I think EE hit them rather well.Kelsey (Dominique) Ridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10646757546422013401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-63827934943748632592009-04-06T16:40:00.000-04:002009-04-06T16:40:00.000-04:00This is pretty confusing; neither story really see...This is pretty confusing; neither story really seems connected. Now, if you had one character go into the other world, or both were actually the same person, I'd understand a bit better.<BR/><BR/>Oh, and I move you just call it fantasy, because the people who will be most interested are those who like swords and magic, not stupid boyfriends and car crashes.<BR/><BR/>Also, explain the backwardsness/illustrations/weird format clearly._*rachel*_https://www.blogger.com/profile/03293167107180931700noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-23669496050154528652009-04-06T14:51:00.000-04:002009-04-06T14:51:00.000-04:00You've misused the word 'niceties.'From www.thefre...You've misused the word 'niceties.'<BR/>From www.thefreedictionary.com:<BR/><BR/><I>1. The quality of showing or requiring careful, precise treatment: the nicety of a diplomatic exchange.<BR/>2. Delicacy of character or feeling; fastidiousness; scrupulousness.<BR/>3. A fine point, small detail, or subtle distinction: the niceties of etiquette.<BR/>4. An elegant or refined feature; an amenity: the niceties of civilized life.<BR/>[Middle English nicete, silliness, exactitude, from Old French, silliness, from nice, silly; see nice.]</I>Neellocnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-25509698464233009912009-04-06T12:53:00.000-04:002009-04-06T12:53:00.000-04:00What ever happened to "Tomato and ShaNaNa" instead...What ever happened to "Tomato and ShaNaNa" instead of Fay Wray? <B>Now that's classic EE.</B><BR/><BR/>I can't even envision an answer to the rhetorical question: "Can true goodness exist outside fantasy?" That's the danger of opening with a rhetorical. If the reader doesn't understand the question...<BR/><BR/>I also don't quite understand the relationship between the real and the fantasy worlds. One has to take precedence over the other. And by that I mean that one story is the prime story while the other is merely its reflection for dramatic purposes. <BR/><BR/>What is "The Ultimate Penalty" for infidelity when your boyfriend is sleeping with your cousin? (Indonesian women specialize in not-so-delicate removal of a body part. Indonesian doctors are the best at reconstructions.) (Last girlfriend that I cheated on slapped me, threw a drink in my face and called me naughty names.)Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-68245014573311116532009-04-06T12:19:00.000-04:002009-04-06T12:19:00.000-04:00Yet another plot that would be handily improved by...Yet another plot that would be handily improved by the addition of a Mole Man. Only in the real-world bits, of course.Eric P.http://www.xanga.com/pass_the_auranoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-76184127602751761772009-04-06T11:55:00.000-04:002009-04-06T11:55:00.000-04:00I get the impression that the anime is in there to...I get the impression that the anime is in there to illuminate Stacey's story, in which case Stacey's story could stand on its own--so the exact contents of the anime aren't important to the query letter, just its presence. My vote is to focus on Stacey.<BR/><BR/>I also sort of question just how much of Probation is necessary to get your point across; you might look at other cases of "play within a play" to get some idea of relative time allotted. I'm not sure how many readers of commercial fiction would appreciate the fantasy interruption, and vice versa.<BR/><BR/>Take out those rhetorical questions; they add nothing.<BR/><BR/>Consider making Probation a novel or presenting it in script format; otherwise there might be a serious gap between how the reader perceives it and how a viewer might.<BR/><BR/>My recommendation is to make the query exclusively about Stacey, play up her conflicts, and only mention Probation in the last sentence when you explain the format.<BR/><BR/>(What percentage of the book is Stacey and what is Probation? Can you crunch some numbers for me?)<BR/><BR/>I gotta ask. Are the next installments of Probation going to be sequels or prequels?<BR/><BR/>I guess, in short, I'm leery about this, and the query needs to make it sound awesome enough to overcome my trepidation.150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-39205898875436511472009-04-06T11:17:00.000-04:002009-04-06T11:17:00.000-04:00Most of these crazy query letters actually make me...Most of these crazy query letters actually make me want to read their books - just to see what in the world the authors are talking about!MeganRebekahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03285116194891827858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-10640820740249662982009-04-06T11:04:00.000-04:002009-04-06T11:04:00.000-04:00EE is correct, the transition isn't working. Sooo...EE is correct, the transition isn't working. Sooo often if one stretches out into new structures never before known to mankind, the readers get lost.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com