tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post3632183766734199286..comments2024-03-18T13:32:44.865-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 1359Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-13730248253733525842017-07-02T20:56:36.317-04:002017-07-02T20:56:36.317-04:00I do have a question -- why Yggdrasil?
I do have a question -- why Yggdrasil?<br />davefragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12151700370200628940noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-81600916846648840342017-06-30T14:49:29.302-04:002017-06-30T14:49:29.302-04:00The query isn't the place to give a plot summa...The query isn't the place to give a plot summary, it's the place to give a teaser.<br /><br />Your plot seems to be: Morrighan wants revenge on whoever murdered her family.<br />If this is the case, things we might need to know:<br /><br />-who was murdered <-- two sisters and three cousins is more informative than "family" which sounds like at least the core group of everyone which isn't the case unless your paragraphs are out of order<br /><br />-who Morrighan suspects and why she suspects them <-- as is, I don't even know what makes this obviously not a gang attack.<br /><br />-what resources Morrighan has to help her find what she's looking for (how her super powers are going to be useful, who her allies are, etc)<br /><br />-who her enemies are <-- or at lest enough about them to understand the level of threat she's up against. Rogue branch of the family is going to be different from unrelated secret government agency which is different from independent super villain.<br /><br />-what's at stake for Morrighan <-- if what you have listed is the entire plot, Morrighan doesn't seem to care that much about protecting her surviving family. It looks like you have her tracking them down just to involve her in an espionage/intelligence gathering plot. So what's her motivation here? Is her version of revenge is stealing files?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-35792691840752042352017-06-30T14:33:13.847-04:002017-06-30T14:33:13.847-04:00Do you really want to mix mythologies as diverse a...Do you really want to mix mythologies as diverse as Yggdrasil and Morrighan ? It pulled me out of the letter. <br />If you do use them together, then be more explicit about the plot. <br />I am guessing that this is a revenge story -- genetically engineered Morrighan goes after the people who slaughtered most of her family. <br />Someone or some entity wants Morrighan either dead or out of the way. They go so far as to frame her. <br />I would guess that your story is Morrighan, a genetically engineered soldier, and her brother (Also a genetic modification) are being hunted by the organization that created them (or someone else) and decides to fight back after the organization slaughters most of her family. davefragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12151700370200628940noreply@blogger.com