tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post1306518449780647462..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 1403Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-28265079972700904072020-06-30T15:06:53.626-04:002020-06-30T15:06:53.626-04:00Are the undead sentenced to wandering the earth fo...Are the undead sentenced to wandering the earth forever going to be doing it as ghosts, zombies or what? Why is this a Bad Thing? I think people could eventually adapt.<br /><br />I'll vote with the others for Needs more plot, not just a series of events but connected ones leading from incident to effect to effect to effect, and maybe a few causes thrown in instead of just mystery.<br /><br />Good LuckAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-6516014681930982032020-06-30T00:26:45.903-04:002020-06-30T00:26:45.903-04:00Author, it seems like you’ve provided more detail ...Author, it seems like you’ve provided more detail about yourself than the story you are querying. The spooky things that happened in your working life probably inspired the story, (which probably makes for interesting reading), but you are at risk of just haivng the novel as vehicle to tell these stories - try to not go down that path. <br />As it happened, it sounds like you have stakes (if Samantha doesn’t solve the problem, the undead will come back to haunt the world), which is great! But it’s not clear what the whisperers want, other than something to do with the seven circles of hell. I think a little more detail in the query will help. <br />Follow EE’s advice!!<br />And, EE - -I want to read those books on your shelf!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com