tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post116646107194426739..comments2024-03-18T13:32:44.865-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: New Beginning 176Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166626012661171372006-12-20T09:46:00.000-05:002006-12-20T09:46:00.000-05:00Thank you, McKoala.Am relieved too.Thank you, McKoala.<BR/>Am relieved too.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166622491043847442006-12-20T08:48:00.000-05:002006-12-20T08:48:00.000-05:00"And what ever happened to Brenda Bradshaw? she wa..."And what ever happened to Brenda Bradshaw? she was awesome."<BR/><BR/>Yeah. Brenda was hot, er, awesome.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166587830931920262006-12-19T23:10:00.000-05:002006-12-19T23:10:00.000-05:00Thank you Dave. I am relieved.Thank you Dave. I am relieved.McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166586519907027272006-12-19T22:48:00.000-05:002006-12-19T22:48:00.000-05:00McKoala,Thanks for writing. I never took your comm...McKoala,<BR/>Thanks for writing. I never took your comment as "bad"... I took it as your surprise that I was capable of being florid and a little verbose. There never was a need to apologize, but since you did, thanks for being so nice.<BR/><BR/>I learned a long time ago when I was shepherding scientific papers through four internal reviews and three external reviews to put a thick skin up to any comments. Those guys got rough, mean, nasty and cruel. And I learned that when someone says "I doesn't work, or it stinks" not to bristle and snort (I'm a taurus by birth) but to THINK HARD as to why they said that and if there is opportunity to improve my writing.<BR/><BR/>I kind of enjoyed having surprised you. And just to let you know, I spent four hours at the story adjusting it and tweaking it. It's a better story for it.<BR/><BR/>Take care <BR/><BR/>PS I've cross-posted this on my blog.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166582381171971652006-12-19T21:39:00.000-05:002006-12-19T21:39:00.000-05:00OMG! No! No! That was not what I meant! What I mea...OMG! No! No! That was not what I meant! What I meant to do was just make sure that Dave was aware of the possible misreading! And the second comment was completely separate, that I was surprised that he was the author, because this wasn't what I expected given his tendency to chop words, 'cos this seemed to have an awful lot in it.<BR/><BR/>Now Dave hates me...crumples into confused furry heap. Off to Dave's blog to grovel and promise to proofread comments more carefully in future...McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166556417278269632006-12-19T14:26:00.000-05:002006-12-19T14:26:00.000-05:00Thanks VA Miss. I caught that too. It's the "too m...Thanks VA Miss. I caught that too. It's the "too many words syndrome" come to haunt me. Saying things twice, like. ;)<BR/><BR/><B>EE, dear EE.</B> <BR/>I would love to open a thread for the best of the facelifts and GTP's but I can't initiate a thread on your blog.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166553800303686792006-12-19T13:43:00.000-05:002006-12-19T13:43:00.000-05:00I love the opening paragraph, it sets the scene so...I love the opening paragraph, it sets the scene so well...but then you hit us over the head with dialect and redundacies. Time being slow is mentioned three times, the barbecue more than once, and no conflict or interesting situation is introduced beyond what we got from the first paragraph.Virginia Misshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07806607750887517701noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166549660123264222006-12-19T12:34:00.000-05:002006-12-19T12:34:00.000-05:00Wow, I'm a moron. How could I not remember that? ...Wow, I'm a moron. How could I not remember that? I must have been busier that month than I thought!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166549404217439032006-12-19T12:30:00.000-05:002006-12-19T12:30:00.000-05:00Bummer. Evil is blowing off my hints to end the ye...<I>Bummer. Evil is blowing off my hints to end the year with some minion-nominated/voted lists of best facelifts, GTPs, characters (from originals, continuations and/or GTPs) and continuations.</I><BR/><BR/>Waddaya mean, blowing it off? We already had the Evil Editor Awards, covering the best New Beginnings from #s 1 - 100.<BR/>(http://evileditor.blogspot.com/2006/09/evil-editor-awards-round-1.html).<BR/><BR/>With over 1200 Guess the Plots, it might take a while to narrow the field. <BR/><BR/>I'm happy to take nominations for best Face-Lifts, though modesty would prevent me from providing a cash award to the critiquer.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166545332462443932006-12-19T11:22:00.000-05:002006-12-19T11:22:00.000-05:00"Pigwell is just soooooo close to Pigswill.Is this..."Pigwell is just soooooo close to Pigswill.<BR/><BR/>Is this what you write Dave?"<BR/><BR/>Ouch!<BR/>Hope that wasn't meant as nasty as it sounds.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166544451589293202006-12-19T11:07:00.000-05:002006-12-19T11:07:00.000-05:00Bummer. Evil is blowing off my hints to end the y...Bummer. Evil is blowing off my hints to end the year with some minion-nominated/voted lists of best facelifts, GTPs, characters (from originals, continuations and/or GTPs) and continuations.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166541529724515542006-12-19T10:18:00.000-05:002006-12-19T10:18:00.000-05:00Evil, you're right. Facelifts 40 and 7 definitely...Evil, you're right. Facelifts 40 and 7 definitely belong on the short list of classics. I didn't realize the ruthless vigilante sorcerers went all the way back.<BR/><BR/>Bernita, you changed your avatar (is that the right word)? And what ever happened to Brenda Bradshaw? she was awesome.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166541079337680322006-12-19T10:11:00.000-05:002006-12-19T10:11:00.000-05:00Oh MY - Kis - that's not the image I want to gener...Oh MY - Kis - that's not the image I want to generate of Luke. I'ma changin' the word - Pontificated. <BR/>and giggling at your remark . <BR/><BR/>I play Springer Bingo - Turn on Springer for 30 seconds. If you see the right htings you get points: <BR/>a) commercial - Minus 5 pt<BR/>b) nudity - plus 10 pt<BR/>c) hear bleeps - plus 2 pt<BR/>d) cat fight - 10 pt<BR/>e) fatty fight - 15 pt<BR/><BR/>and make the rest up yourselfDave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166539826229081682006-12-19T09:50:00.000-05:002006-12-19T09:50:00.000-05:00Mendacity! That's what it is; mendacity! -JTCMendacity! That's what it is; mendacity! -JTCAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166535658379637112006-12-19T08:40:00.000-05:002006-12-19T08:40:00.000-05:00"Pontificated" implies an inbred hick making an aw...<I>"Pontificated" implies an inbred hick making an awkward attempt at elevated diction...</I><BR/><BR/>Well, it would if it was dialog, but here it's narrative and just doesn't feel right: it gives me a different image of the character than I think the rest of the opening suggests...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166512917719381522006-12-19T02:21:00.000-05:002006-12-19T02:21:00.000-05:00Every time I see the words AFTER GOYA in facelift ...Every time I see the words AFTER GOYA in <A HREF="http://evileditor.blogspot.com/2006/07/face-lift-112.html" REL="nofollow">facelift 112</A> I giggle hysterically.<BR/><BR/>AFTER GOYA!!!pacatruehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04125048243775811714noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166511899522693102006-12-19T02:04:00.000-05:002006-12-19T02:04:00.000-05:00I don't mind "pontificated." It reminds me of the ...I don't mind "pontificated." It reminds me of the time I was watching Jerry Springer and some uneducated, inner city bonehead used the word "pensive" completely out of context. In the next hour, no less than three other guests, none of whom could string together a coherent thought, used the word "pensive" in the same, utterly incorrect way. "Pontificated" implies an inbred hick making an awkward attempt at elevated diction, and not quite making it. I'm sure his use of the word would have impressed Daisy-Mae and Bobby-Sue. Hearing it, they might even have felt pensive.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166506934715910602006-12-19T00:42:00.000-05:002006-12-19T00:42:00.000-05:00McKoala - You crack me up. :)McKoala - You crack me up. :)HawkOwlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08506953701159624542noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166506060774497782006-12-19T00:27:00.000-05:002006-12-19T00:27:00.000-05:00Pigwell is just soooooo close to Pigswill.Is this ...<I>Pigwell is just soooooo close to Pigswill.<BR/><BR/>Is this what you write Dave?</I><BR/><BR/><BR/>Ohh...! Is there an editor in the house?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166504627845091432006-12-19T00:03:00.000-05:002006-12-19T00:03:00.000-05:00The line "In Pigwell, time is not measured by days...The line "In Pigwell, time is not measured by days or weeks but by the number of eighteen wheelers that drive past my house"<BR/><B>is not my writing, </B><BR/>Someone suggested the line and I used it. I would have used any small town in West Virginia if I had written it. <BR/><BR/>I often ask friends to give a suggestion for a story and then, after thinking about it for a time, usually six months to a year later, I crank out a story. <BR/><BR/>Let's see: <BR/>- "pontificated" is going to change.<BR/>- "Time must go slowly out here in Pigwell then" has to change to something else. It is redundant. It's too many words. <BR/>- O'Mullington is going to change too. It's a little too sarcastic and heavy handed. <BR/>- I think that I'm going to make Tyler a marine and change his name to something latino. I think that will temper the sarcasm and up the diversity quotient (that makes no sense to me either, but Iit's a good escuse)<BR/><BR/>And yes, there are lots of words.Dave Fragmentshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17985158361431606939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166502856561510512006-12-18T23:34:00.000-05:002006-12-18T23:34:00.000-05:00I liked the first sentence. The rest, less and les...I liked the first sentence. The rest, less and less until I wanted to stop reading. When I got to "Time didn't matter out here"-a point I might add that we already got from the very first line and then hammered again and again-I just didn't want to go on.<BR/><BR/>But I did, in the spirit of EE's blog. The dialogue was stilted.<BR/><BR/>The continuation was predictable, but at least okay.<BR/><BR/><BR/>Must be the pre-holiday biz'ness that needs tendin' and all those trips to Walmart to eye the purty things and all, ya reckon?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166500008257317082006-12-18T22:46:00.000-05:002006-12-18T22:46:00.000-05:00Pigwell is just soooooo close to Pigswill.Is this ...Pigwell is just soooooo close to Pigswill.<BR/><BR/>Is this what you write Dave? Not what I expected. There's an awful lot of words in it...McKoalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01457446171624585099noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166498444435733322006-12-18T22:20:00.000-05:002006-12-18T22:20:00.000-05:00anybody have any other nominations for all time gr...<I>anybody have any other nominations for all time greatest FL?</I><BR/><BR/>Face-lifts 40 and 7 were also distinctive for running a phrase into the ground, #40 being the origin of the Ruthless Vigilante Sorcerers.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166497454787298062006-12-18T22:04:00.000-05:002006-12-18T22:04:00.000-05:00Wow, those facelifts from over the summer were fun...Wow, those facelifts from over the summer were funny, but brutal. Evil really has gotten a lot nicer since then.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1166495650712071902006-12-18T21:34:00.000-05:002006-12-18T21:34:00.000-05:00I certainly hope the opening is supposed to be hum...I certainly hope the opening is supposed to be humorous, as the dialog is so contrived as to be laughable. If the imagery desired in the mind of the reader is that of a cartoon, it works. If not, well, back to the ol' drawing board. The last two paragraphs are particularly painful.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com