tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post116390780504806203..comments2024-03-18T13:32:44.865-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 232Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164412860672897732006-11-24T19:01:00.000-05:002006-11-24T19:01:00.000-05:00Thanks Illiterate,I shall take the part in () out ...Thanks Illiterate,<BR/><BR/>I shall take the part in () out completely. It sounds better without it anyway I think. Too many "never's" there.<BR/><BR/>I sure do apreciate all the help!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164409115209675362006-11-24T17:58:00.000-05:002006-11-24T17:58:00.000-05:00"Alexis finds a friend in Gideon (something she’s ..."Alexis finds a friend in Gideon (something she’s never had before) and together they discover the cult’s leader is a banished god named Nassaner, who derives his power from willing human sacrifices."<BR/><BR/>I heard that some agents/editors do. So, just in case you 'might' want to watch out for these.<BR/><BR/>The remake does look good to me, otherwise. Keep in mind that many of us here are compleately unpublished, and some may not ever be, so don't take the mimions' opinions too seriously.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164404625413793402006-11-24T16:43:00.000-05:002006-11-24T16:43:00.000-05:00Thanks, Nut!Thanks, Nut!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164401492453880002006-11-24T15:51:00.000-05:002006-11-24T15:51:00.000-05:00I like it; I think its much more to the point, and...I like it; I think its much more to the point, and looks more adventurous.<BR/><BR/>I hope the ones that know what they're doing show up soon though, since all I can give you is an amateur's opinion.<BR/><BR/>'Break a leg' & hope to see your stuff on the shelf soon.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164393739340961212006-11-24T13:42:00.000-05:002006-11-24T13:42:00.000-05:00Okay...here is the new and improved query. Thank y...Okay...here is the new and improved query. Thank you for all your comments and advice. If anyone cares to rip this one up too...I'd really appreciate it! I’ve worked so hard on this book; I owe it to it and myself to represent it well, dagnabbit! <BR/><BR/>THE PRIDE is a young adult urban fantasy, complete at 77,000 words.<BR/><BR/>When seventeen-year-old Alexis escapes death from the religious cult that raised her, she doesn’t know she’s only half human. She’s never driven a car, never made her own decisions and never been alone. Hitchhiking down the highway at midnight disguised as a boy, she’s picked up by Gideon, a shapeshifter with problems of his own. Alexis finds a friend in Gideon (something she’s never had before) and together they discover the cult’s leader is a banished god named Nassaner, who derives his power from willing human sacrifices. Alexis cannot escape him for long, because he knows she carries the blood of the lion people and her sacrifice will give him much more power than that of a human. He’s spent years brainwashing his followers and since one is Alexis’s own mother, Nassaner will stop at nothing to get her back. If she is to survive, Alexis must learn to stop running, embrace her true self and let the lioness stand up and fight.<BR/><BR/>Followed by my published clips and contact info of course....<BR/><BR/>Thanks guys!<BR/><BR/>Rhona,Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164124008188713872006-11-21T10:46:00.000-05:002006-11-21T10:46:00.000-05:00What insolence! The great eunuch never reveals h...What insolence! The great eunuch never reveals his name. Not even to that nice publisher. Hence, no 'Ode to Evil' published, this year. <BR/><BR/>Now I shall embark on a great quest for fiber. Beware mortals, eunuch will be back.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164116429933421142006-11-21T08:40:00.000-05:002006-11-21T08:40:00.000-05:00Mean gutterball make eunuch sad.Aww...wait. Is you...<I>Mean gutterball make eunuch sad.</I><BR/><BR/>Aww...wait. Is your name Choog in another book?? That explains everything!GutterBallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17943760313844692975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164082296982728272006-11-20T23:11:00.000-05:002006-11-20T23:11:00.000-05:00Ha ha, I got it gutterball! Oh wait... Hey, that'...Ha ha, I got it gutterball! Oh wait... Hey, that's not fair! Mean gutterball make eunuch sad.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164067147542260332006-11-20T18:59:00.000-05:002006-11-20T18:59:00.000-05:00I wasn't talking about the wet spot, Eunuch. Heh.I wasn't talking about the <I>wet</I> spot, Eunuch. Heh.GutterBallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17943760313844692975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164051493540590742006-11-20T14:38:00.000-05:002006-11-20T14:38:00.000-05:00I had hoped it was gtp #3 also. it was the best o...I had hoped it was gtp #3 also. it was the best one.<BR/><BR/>I suppose redcap is being honest about his/her personal feelings but I agree with december.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164047641207254602006-11-20T13:34:00.000-05:002006-11-20T13:34:00.000-05:00This isn't a query. It's a short synopsis.This isn't a query. It's a short synopsis.Reihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17005292189176596201noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164046683072046512006-11-20T13:18:00.000-05:002006-11-20T13:18:00.000-05:00This is the kind of fantasy adventure I'd have to ...This is the kind of fantasy adventure I'd have to pry out of my young niece's hands - the female protagonist, culty stuff, talking animals, and a final crescendo of a confrontation. <BR/><BR/>There's a thrivng market out there for this sort of story - and plenty of Aunties with credit cards to buy them, too!Kate Thorntonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16449435177807306686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164034827228396252006-11-20T10:00:00.000-05:002006-11-20T10:00:00.000-05:00Woe is me! Another case of frame the innocent eunu...Woe is me! Another case of frame the innocent eunuch. Will the horror never end?<BR/><BR/>All I really did, was spill some OJ, I can't help it, if it looks like pee!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164034645329884442006-11-20T09:57:00.000-05:002006-11-20T09:57:00.000-05:00It might be cruel if anyone took it seriously.It might be cruel if anyone took it seriously.nonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00415222406280230021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164034573253236992006-11-20T09:56:00.000-05:002006-11-20T09:56:00.000-05:00Okay, redcap, looking at your profile, you do read...Okay, redcap, looking at your profile, you do read fantasy(JKR). But you do understand that before the books you love were published, they were once unfinished works in progress, right? <BR/><BR/>This book sounds like the things I like, once that take me on an adventure. That's why I'd read it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164032280247862532006-11-20T09:18:00.000-05:002006-11-20T09:18:00.000-05:00Would it be cruel of me to ask why people think bo...<I>Would it be cruel of me to ask why people think books like that would sell in the first place?</I><BR/><BR/>No, just unimaginative. I guess you like exactly the same things as everyone you know, and don't ever try anything new.<BR/><BR/>It also shows a distinct lack of research and awareness, as urban fantasy is quite a popular genre.<BR/><BR/><I> If I picked that up in a book shop, I would expect to be standing at the "dump" table at the time.</I><BR/><BR/><I>That's</I> cruel.Staciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07969399927758009095noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164031060643008202006-11-20T08:57:00.000-05:002006-11-20T08:57:00.000-05:00author: good luck, and don't give up. redcap: ...author: good luck, and don't give up. <BR/><BR/>redcap: different people like different books. This book looks great for fantasy fans, you might like some other genre. Everyone has their preferences. If you don't like the genre, or even the author's style, don't assume, that you're the only one with a sence of taste. I mean, I'm really not into romance, but there are plenty of people who are, so, great for them. Just cause its not your cup of tea, doesn't mean others won't drink it.<BR/><BR/>Okay, Proffessor not is done.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164030124553193472006-11-20T08:42:00.000-05:002006-11-20T08:42:00.000-05:00Improved queries may be submitted as comments (The...Improved queries may be submitted as comments (There's one at Face-lift 230 right now), but since Guess the Plot and EE's amusing remarks would be gone or minimal, it won't be front-page material.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164029762358296052006-11-20T08:36:00.000-05:002006-11-20T08:36:00.000-05:00Thank you Naomi and Nut. I really apreciate the ku...Thank you Naomi and Nut. I really apreciate the kudos and the advice.<BR/><BR/>Does anyone know if we can re-submitt improved queries to Evil Editor? Or does he frown on that?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1164026148774156072006-11-20T07:35:00.000-05:002006-11-20T07:35:00.000-05:00Would it be cruel of me to ask why people think bo...Would it be cruel of me to ask why people think books like that would sell in the first place? If I picked that up in a book shop, I would expect to be standing at the "dump" table at the time.redcaphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01916750858980883634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163997431029191972006-11-19T23:37:00.000-05:002006-11-19T23:37:00.000-05:00Meh, I didn't believe me, either. And I checked my...Meh, I didn't believe me, either. And I checked my shoes when I left, just to be sure.<BR/><BR/>Eunuch, you need either more fiber or less. I'm not sure which.GutterBallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17943760313844692975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163993855261219262006-11-19T22:37:00.000-05:002006-11-19T22:37:00.000-05:00gutterball, you really don't want to stand behind ...gutterball, you really don't want to stand behind that podium after eunuch.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163993301787400222006-11-19T22:28:00.000-05:002006-11-19T22:28:00.000-05:00Yeah, gutterball, I believe you. You mean the cer...Yeah, gutterball, I believe you. You mean the cerial bowl, don't you.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163989072324753182006-11-19T21:17:00.000-05:002006-11-19T21:17:00.000-05:00*stands behind a podium*The Chiefs are going to th...*stands behind a podium*<BR/><BR/>The Chiefs are going to the SuperBowl this year.GutterBallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17943760313844692975noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1163985693112248362006-11-19T20:21:00.000-05:002006-11-19T20:21:00.000-05:00Looks like 230 needs some attention, for the re-wr...Looks like 230 needs some attention, for the re-write.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com