tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post115531409963258152..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: New Beginning 67Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155588140880207302006-08-14T16:42:00.000-04:002006-08-14T16:42:00.000-04:00The opening throws me enough that I have to re-rea...The opening throws me enough that I have to re-read it. On second read, I realize she doesn't say at the opening "Why haven't you found my son?" So that was a hint that he's found, but I missed it. I'm assuming he's still kidnapped and the kidnappers are somewhere in the country with him or something like that. The subtle line about his son's nightmares at first struck me as a typo.<BR/><BR/>Also, the detective's attitude doesn't feel right to me, but that was when I thought the kid was still missing. <BR/><BR/>Maybe he says something else and Ms. Rose thinks: "At least he didn't throw that court order in my face this time" indicating that she's been down this path before.<BR/><BR/>The chuckle seems over the top, at least to me.<BR/><BR/>Could be a great story, but I think the opening needs to better ground us where the story starts. Hope that makes sense.<BR/><BR/>JohnAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155486741545198642006-08-13T12:32:00.000-04:002006-08-13T12:32:00.000-04:00I agree with ljcohen. "He didn't have to suffer th...I agree with ljcohen. "He didn't have to suffer through his son's nightmares" is too subtle. On the other hand, knowing the story now, I don't think the premise is bad.Dan Lewishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06388782974143019065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155435711516904122006-08-12T22:21:00.000-04:002006-08-12T22:21:00.000-04:00One thing that bugs me. Police usually stop looki...One thing that bugs me. Police usually stop looking for kidnapped victims and start looking for dead bodies after about 48 hours. It's been seven <I>months</I>. The chances of her son being alive are pretty slim (psychic visions notwithstanding) and I would expect the detective to address that. Maybe he does further on.braunhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00387344142594757730noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155416525235350452006-08-12T17:02:00.000-04:002006-08-12T17:02:00.000-04:00"The rage drained from her like oil from a cracked..."The rage drained from her like oil from a cracked block." <BR/>Brilliant!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155406045377847782006-08-12T14:07:00.000-04:002006-08-12T14:07:00.000-04:00Knowing absolutely nothing about the novel, it see...Knowing absolutely nothing about the novel, it seems an odd place to start--seven months after a kidnapped boy has been saved. Are you sure this is the beginning? The story may be about catching the guy who did it, or how the family copes with it all (I'm thinking of The Lovely Bones, for instance) but the story still STARTS with the kidnapping. <BR/><BR/>If you find yourself showing the kidnapping in flashback, then you know you started in the wrong place for sure.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155402073173544232006-08-12T13:01:00.000-04:002006-08-12T13:01:00.000-04:00Please don't let this be a Maunchausen-by-proxy st...Please don't let this be a Maunchausen-by-proxy story.<BR/><BR/>Liked her making him jump, but a problem for me is since the child is now safe, regardless of psychological trauma, the tension dissolves right there.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155395729815417602006-08-12T11:15:00.000-04:002006-08-12T11:15:00.000-04:00All three authors, actually, as I combined two con...All three authors, actually, as I combined two continuations into one.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155394883148841402006-08-12T11:01:00.000-04:002006-08-12T11:01:00.000-04:00Hmmm, I thought maybe just a bit too wordy of a s...Hmmm, I thought maybe just a bit too wordy of a start, tho quite intriquing. I'd read this book since I got a sense that it may involve some paranormal; that the kid wasnt actually home, just sharing nightmares.<BR/>(I'm a mom with an occasionally psychic and sometimes psychotic kid, he's a teenager; it's axiomatic)<BR/><BR/>Well written continuation! Kudos to both Authorsmagzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02351879762711676150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1155389248110495082006-08-12T09:27:00.000-04:002006-08-12T09:27:00.000-04:00My apologies to the author, but I found the contin...My apologies to the author, but I found the continuation far more compelling than the first 150 words. I was confused at first, not realizing that the child was recovered and home (the reference to the nightmares) and on first read, thought the mother's affect was a little odd.<BR/><BR/>Maybe begin with her hurt and confusion after getting the court order? That sounds interesting!Lisa Cohenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07530826748768737972noreply@blogger.com