tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post115453552096875509..comments2024-03-26T18:28:06.391-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 143Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154784378521879092006-08-05T09:26:00.000-04:002006-08-05T09:26:00.000-04:00I am severely put off by the names in this book. C...I am severely put off by the names in this book. Cole Black is bad enough, but Jackie Spain, Annie Mott, Jimmy Schmidt and Jake Drum are the poison icing on the sickly cake. <BR/><BR/>Also, what's the point of Jake and Annie? They seem to vanish... Were they killed in the fire?<BR/><BR/>Also, don't tell me Annie is funny and outspoken. Let me decide for myself.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154752476689723002006-08-05T00:34:00.000-04:002006-08-05T00:34:00.000-04:00So you're keeping the name Cole Black so you can m...So you're keeping the name Cole Black so you can make a bad pun?<BR/><BR/>Rethink.<BR/><BR/>My word verification is Dljoe--there's a name for you.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154719148806569192006-08-04T15:19:00.000-04:002006-08-04T15:19:00.000-04:00I googled Cole Black and at least one guy has that...I googled Cole Black and at least one guy has that name.<BR/>Keep in mind someone named their child Paris Hilton.<BR/>If I ever get an agent and/or editor who requests a name change it'll happen.<BR/>His name provides a funny moment with a rookie reporter after the fire.Inkmandoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07125968831024865452noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154713804858630742006-08-04T13:50:00.000-04:002006-08-04T13:50:00.000-04:00Really? You're absolutely wedded to the idea of a ...Really? You're absolutely wedded to the idea of a character named Cole Black? It couldn't even be Blake or something?Daisy Batemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10031425541717458261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154696284127064742006-08-04T08:58:00.000-04:002006-08-04T08:58:00.000-04:00A good J-name that you should consider is "Jarvis"...A good J-name that you should consider is "Jarvis".<BR/><BR/>Also, "Jerome".Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154689156932710212006-08-04T06:59:00.000-04:002006-08-04T06:59:00.000-04:00The original title was (and may still be) A Dream ...The original title was (and may still be) A Dream in Big Moon. Jacki Spain's origanal name was Marne Brint.<BR/>Some of the 'J's will go, but Cole stays. I was going to name him Dweezil or Moon Unit, but those were taken.<BR/>Marne and Cole get married on a Christmas day.Inkmandoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07125968831024865452noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154671644128272832006-08-04T02:07:00.000-04:002006-08-04T02:07:00.000-04:00Definitely needs a catchier title.Definitely needs a catchier title.HawkOwlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08506953701159624542noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154649435192716392006-08-03T19:57:00.000-04:002006-08-03T19:57:00.000-04:00The names bother me too. Not only do Jake, Jacki a...The names bother me too. Not only do Jake, Jacki and Jimmy all start with J, but Annie, Jacki and Jimmy all end with a cutie-pants "ee" sound that no middle-aged adult should have to suffer. On top of that, everyone has the one-syllable last names, and "Jacki Spain" sounds like a superhero.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154635887984173752006-08-03T16:11:00.000-04:002006-08-03T16:11:00.000-04:00In fact, I'd rather read the story of how funny An...In fact, I'd rather read the story of how funny Annie Mott saved tortured Jake Drum. At least Jake has some real problems -- gambling and goons. Cole and Jacki read like straw men to me.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154635546625974362006-08-03T16:05:00.000-04:002006-08-03T16:05:00.000-04:00Why is her best friend in the query?She's outspoke...<I>Why is her best friend in the query?</I><BR/><BR/>She's outspoken and funny. That makes her the most interesting character in the book.Evil Editorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154635194107533772006-08-03T15:59:00.000-04:002006-08-03T15:59:00.000-04:00Thanks for the input.The original query actually g...Thanks for the input.<BR/>The original query actually got about a 50% agent response for the first three chapters. Alas, no requests for the full.<BR/>Back to work.<BR/><BR/>Then I'd say your query isn't the problem.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154634815227619372006-08-03T15:53:00.000-04:002006-08-03T15:53:00.000-04:00"Mr. Maybe" sounds like a good title for a book. H..."Mr. Maybe" sounds like a good title for a book. Hmm ...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154629651831732472006-08-03T14:27:00.000-04:002006-08-03T14:27:00.000-04:00Why is her best friend in the query? She doesn't ...Why is her best friend in the query? She doesn't do anything. In fact, you only mention her that one time.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154629593611458512006-08-03T14:26:00.000-04:002006-08-03T14:26:00.000-04:00Thanks for the input.The original query actually g...Thanks for the input.<BR/>The original query actually got about a 50% agent response for the first three chapters. Alas, no requests for the full.<BR/>Back to work.Inkmandoohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07125968831024865452noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154628676744604142006-08-03T14:11:00.000-04:002006-08-03T14:11:00.000-04:00Why does the boss need to find a reason to fire Sc...Why does the boss need to find a reason to fire Schmidt? Propositioning a direct report and retaliating when she turns you down is textbook sexual harassment; if he didn't get fired she could file a major lawsuit.Daisy Batemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10031425541717458261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154628151054970562006-08-03T14:02:00.000-04:002006-08-03T14:02:00.000-04:00Jacki/Jimmy/Jake --- huge red flag there. Way too ...Jacki/Jimmy/Jake --- huge red flag there. Way too many "J's." It was confusing reading the query -- I can't imagine what it would be like reading the book.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03662058845481140283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154627860218466152006-08-03T13:57:00.000-04:002006-08-03T13:57:00.000-04:00The problem with the names is too obvious to comme...The problem with the names is too obvious to comment on -- and yet, I'll bite. Synopsis #1 nailed it. :-)<BR/><BR/>The whole bit about Jacki wanting to maintain her independence fails the believablity test for me. Most single women I know would like to find a nice guy, it's just that he has to fit into their lifestyles. <BR/><BR/>You know, when you have a (nice) house and a job & your own kids and he has a house and two kids, one of which is the sort that doesn't quite ever get his act together to leave home ... well, the guy may be cute, but is it really worth fighting for the remote to spend time with him? ;-) Perhaps looking for the next Mr. Maybe ok is a better option.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154627088372291942006-08-03T13:44:00.000-04:002006-08-03T13:44:00.000-04:00Have wondered how wise it is to emphasize the targ...Have wondered how wise it is to emphasize the target age group - especially to the detriment of any significant plot hooks that might set the story apart from other romantic suspense novels.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154626900475914092006-08-03T13:41:00.000-04:002006-08-03T13:41:00.000-04:00Oops. I meant I'd love to read #2--although #1 was...Oops. I meant I'd love to read #2--although #1 was kinda funny.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1154626858645719312006-08-03T13:40:00.000-04:002006-08-03T13:40:00.000-04:00I guessed #4 until I hit the name Cole Black, whic...I guessed #4 until I hit the name Cole Black, which I thought had to be a joke. I'd love to read #1.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com