tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post115124669075933511..comments2024-03-18T13:32:44.865-04:00Comments on Evil Editor: Face-Lift 84Evil Editorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03879826770199639420noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151425803649746142006-06-27T12:30:00.000-04:002006-06-27T12:30:00.000-04:00Thanks everybody. It hurts when it's your turn bu...Thanks everybody. It hurts when it's your turn but I appreciate all the thoughtful tips from EE and the Minions...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151363292824289172006-06-26T19:08:00.000-04:002006-06-26T19:08:00.000-04:00EE and minions missed this gem??????Jake's anger a...EE and minions missed this gem??????<BR/><BR/>Jake's anger at this revelation is tempered by the heartbreaking story Michelle finally tells about how she was drugged and assaulted by perpetrators who were never punished.<BR/><BR/><BR/>HUH???? You're wrongly accusing me of rape, ruining my life and then you want your friend to tell me some sob story about how she was raped and didn't report it. Oh, OK, now I understand and I'm not angry anymore.<BR/><BR/>HUH?????????????<BR/><BR/>The thing that this plot needs is a CONTROL ALT DELETEAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151336383351029992006-06-26T11:39:00.000-04:002006-06-26T11:39:00.000-04:00I would prefer to read plot number 3, too.I would prefer to read plot number 3, too.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151324315953839642006-06-26T08:18:00.000-04:002006-06-26T08:18:00.000-04:00"Besides some realistic football action . . ." Th..."Besides some realistic football action . . ." This has been tried to death and has NEVER been accomplished. If you've ever played football, you know it simply cannot be done. However, most people have never played football so some may buy it.<BR/><BR/>To me, it sounds as if the author knows nothing about football -expecially college football and the way the national championship works (as EE pointed out). When you write, write what you know or get to know what you write through extensive research.<BR/><BR/>As far as the "main" plot goes, there are way too many holes. If you are going to write about rape and rape accusations you are going to have to write a very tight story. Just my humble opinion.<BR/>-JTCAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151294706406357322006-06-26T00:05:00.000-04:002006-06-26T00:05:00.000-04:00Plus, the "psycho woman getting revenge for rape/a...Plus, the "psycho woman getting revenge for rape/abuse/men in general" has been done to death and always struck me as creepily sexist (towards the women.) Turn it more in a thriller-ish direction and I might read it, but as it is I would be icked.Lunahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17015037227580626815noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151290500295785982006-06-25T22:55:00.000-04:002006-06-25T22:55:00.000-04:00From the query, I didn't think this sounded like a...From the query, I didn't think this sounded like a misuse of a rape plot...sounded at the end like the author was trying to bring sexual assualt to light as an issue of possible concern in college athletics (or in general).<BR/><BR/>Also - the two girls ganging up to accuse someone of rape?? Why not? Has anyone else seen the movie Wild Things? One girl was not actually assaulted but went in with the other girl to help get him convicted. It had some more twists to it, but that was a big part of the plot.<BR/><BR/>Not sure from this query why they picked this football player to gang up on rather than the guy who ACTUALLY assaulted Michelle...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151286248591741842006-06-25T21:44:00.000-04:002006-06-25T21:44:00.000-04:00A Ham Newton isn't a cookie. It's meat and cake!A Ham Newton isn't a cookie. It's meat and cake!Mazementhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05582737613375371386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151283114291961202006-06-25T20:51:00.000-04:002006-06-25T20:51:00.000-04:00Regarding what "a reader" said--worse than soundin...Regarding what "a reader" said--worse than sounding inappropriately affectionate, "sugar bowl" sounds rather like a euphemism for a person's lady parts.<BR/><BR/>Not to put too fine a point on it.<BR/><BR/>"Ham Newton = worst cookie ever." Hah!Feemushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01333137107196677329noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151272970418515382006-06-25T18:02:00.000-04:002006-06-25T18:02:00.000-04:00Ham Newton = The worst cookie ever.I wouldn't ment...Ham Newton = The worst cookie ever.<BR/><BR/>I wouldn't mention the Duke lax team in the query--charged news items like that tend to polarize people, and you don't want the reader polarizing opposite of you.<BR/><BR/>("But don't opposite poles attract?")<BR/>("Shut up. I'm making a point.")<BR/><BR/>-AAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151259301046109472006-06-25T14:15:00.000-04:002006-06-25T14:15:00.000-04:00The title, "Sugar Bowl", is, to put it bluntly, ki...The title, "Sugar Bowl", is, to put it bluntly, kind of sick when you consider that the story is about a rape. (Yeah, I get the football reference.)<BR/><BR/>It implies, at least to me, that there was something pleasurable about it, since "sugar" is usually what you call a lover.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151258530059126872006-06-25T14:02:00.000-04:002006-06-25T14:02:00.000-04:00Why not try plot #3 instead? I'm intrigued.... And...Why not try plot #3 instead? I'm intrigued.... <BR/><BR/>And how can you talk about West Virginia football without mentioning some kind of riot? ;)<BR/><BR/>This query probably just needs a little more clarity (both of the characters' motivations and the real climax of the book).Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-26791026.post-1151255995647361382006-06-25T13:19:00.000-04:002006-06-25T13:19:00.000-04:00I'm not sure how to say this.False accusations of ...I'm not sure how to say this.<BR/><BR/>False accusations of rape being used to ratchet up the tension in a novel that culminates in the Big Game..? You may want to rethink this one. <BR/><BR/>Rape is kind of a sensitive issue to be used as a plot device in a football story. Matt Christopher used to write sports books for boys and girls in which the main character had a personal issue that was dogging him (or sometimes her), but things somehow worked out in time for the Big Game. These issues usually involved braces, or a stuttering problem. Not rape.<BR/><BR/>If the rape charges (and Michelle's actual assault) are more than just plot devices, perhaps the novel should build toward the resolution of those charges, not the Mountaineer's shot at the title.<BR/><BR/>There's a difference between political correctness (of which I've never been accused) and the inability to empathize with the victims of a monstrous crime. I don't see Michelle's actions as remotely believable given what she's been through. (I don't see Robin or Jake behaving believably here either, but that's a story issue, which is not what I'm talking about.)<BR/><BR/>I think this has the potential to grossly offend about 85 percent of the people who might read your query. <BR/><BR/>Maybe this should be a book about rape, or about being falsely accused of rape, set in the world of college football. <BR/><BR/>But a football novel with a little rape thrown in, well, I think that's a serious non-starter.michael gavaghenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00209555723658389015noreply@blogger.com