A quick bit on the revision. After some thought and other reading, I decided to try simply focusing on what happens in Act I for the query. As such, the morphine stays (sort of, she doesn't hook up with the doctor plot wise, but steals it in Act II, but the ramp to that is definitely Act I), and another plot that was in an earlier draft (not seen here) made it back in. Nadya's conflict with the commissar spans most of the book, but its not the main plot. So, here's where I'm at:
Nadezdah Buzina, a pilot serving in the Red Army’s all-female 586th Fighter Aviation Regiment during WWII, is a natural flyer. Sadly, her inborn talent is no match for veterans of the Luftwaffe. While she patrols war-torn Stalingrad, Gerhard Rademacher, a German ace, blasts her out of the sky, leaving her severely burned and the sole survivor of her flight.
Nadya vows revenge, but when Commissar Petrov, an NKVD political officer, thinks she survived the dogfight due to cowardice rather than luck, her life is jeopardized by his ensuing investigation. Her family has ties to the White Army, and she could be summarily executed if that’s discovered proven--or Unfortunately, if she doesn’t cooperate with the Petrov’s interrogations, he can shoot her just the same.
Worse, winter approaches and the cold exacerbates Nadya’s injuries. Nadya She manages to find relief from the crippling pain with morphine, but her CO refuses to let her fly while using it. However, there’s still a way Nadya can get some. [That would make more sense if you said her CO cut off her access to the drug, rather than he refused to let her fly.] The regiment’s doctor has offered to exchange undocumented syrettes for nighttime encounters, and since Rademacher is still out there killing her friends, Nadya is about to find out what she’s willing to do to stop him.
Thanks in advance!
The White Army is as obscure to us as the 586th; we can do without it in the query. The last sentence may be enough to suggest what the rest of the book is about, so even though the previous versions were in good shape, so is this one.
This is just your plot summary; I assume you'll mention at the beginning or end that the all-female regiment was real. Or is there no risk that we'll think you created it as part of your "fictional world"?
It's time to send out a few queries and see what happens, assuming you've put as much effort into the book as the query.