Dear Evil Editor,
I believe that my 85,000-word historical fantasy, Avalyn, is the type novel you are looking to represent. The story of Avalyn is set in late 12th c. England.
The rituals also awaken her to bodily desires, and she finds herself falling for her best friend, Dylan, an orphaned ward of the church. The two live a moment in the bliss of young love. [A moment? Define "moment."] But one night when a ritual has stripped her sense of touch, she causes a fire that claims the life of both Dylan and her father. [I see no reason to point out she had no sense of touch, when the other senses can easily detect fire. Just say she caused a fire.]
Guilt-ridden, Avalyn realizes the true sacrifices that her pagan faith has begotten. She settles into a simpler existence, and marries a good Christian man. But glimpses of her lost love, Dylan, living among Celtic Otherworld tempt her back to her Old Ways. [Why is "Old Ways" capitalized?] [Bland wrap-up. What is her goal in returning to her old ways? Does she want to dump her husband and go to this Otherworld? Does she have to die to go there? If that's her dilemma, say so.]
If you are interested, I will gladly send you my completed manuscript.